托福独立写作帮忙改一下吧,按托福的标准给一下分,可以的话提个建议看怎样能上3分.agreeordisagree:Sincepeoplecaresocialrecognitionmorethanmoney,theywillworkhardertoobtainsocialrecognitioneventhoughther

　　托福独立写作帮忙改一下吧,按托福的标准给一下分,可以的话提个建议看怎样能上3分.

　　agreeordisagree:Sincepeoplecaresocialrecognitionmorethanmoney,theywillworkhardertoobtainsocialrecognitioneventhoughthereisnomoremoneygiven.

　　Nowadays,somepeopleholdtheopinionthatpeopleworkformoney,butothershaveadifferentattitude,theythinkpeopleworkforpublicrecognition.AsfarasIamconcerned,Ithinkpeopleworkmustformoney.

　　Themainreasonformyviewthatpeoplecaremoreaboutmoneyisthatpeoplealwayschoosejobbycomparehowmuchmoneycanacompanyoffer.Myuncleisagoodexample.HewasamanagerofanITcompanybefore,buthissalaryinthatcompanyisonlytwothirdofhissalarynow.Moneymakeshimwenttothecompanyhestaysnow,evenifheisonlyatechnologyworkerhere.

　　What'more,Ithinkthemoneyisimportantbecausewecanusemoneytodolotsofthingsthatthepublicrecognitioncannotgive.Wecanbuywantwelikebyoursalaryandtraveltoseveralplacebymoney,evenifyouareapeoplewhoisfamous,youshouldalsopayforthethings.Moneysometimescannotbereplacedbyanyotherthings.That’swhyIthinkmoneyismoreimportantthanpublicrecognition.

　　Lastbutnotleast,Ibelievepublicrecognitionmaycausedbymoneytosomeextent.Therearealotofpeoplewhogettheirpublicrecognitionbecauseoftheirmoney.Forinstant,BillGatesisfamousbecauseheistherichestpersonallovertheworld.ThemostpeopleknowhimbecauseofhismoneybutnotheistheleaderofIBM.Thiskindofpeoplewhohaveapublicrecognitionwasalwaysworkingformoneyatbeginningandwhentheyearnenoughmoney,theywillgettheirpublicrecognition.

　　However,thereisalsoasmallpartofsomepeopleworkforpublicrecognition.Oneoftheircommoncharacteristicisthattheyalreadyhaveenoughmoneytouse,sotheycankeeptheirlifewithoutearningmoney.

　　Inanutshell,Ibelievepeopleworkformoneybecausemoneyisthekeytomaketheirlifegoingonandlivemorecomfortable.