注：括弧内()的文字就是我润色的部分.我是一段一段的润色哦.

　　First,youngstudentsgoabroadtostudycanopentheireyes.because,youngstudentsaremoreliketoabsorbthenewconceptandnewidea,andthosearealittledifferentfromourcountry's.soitisagreatchanceforthemtolearnthecultureofothercountry,whichcanopentheireyes.

　　1.(Studyingabroaddefinitelybroadensyourhorizons.Tomostpeople,itisanenrichingandeye-openingadventure.Youwillgainin-depthknowledgeofanotherculture'scustoms,experiencelocalcultureandinthemeantimeimproveyourforeignlanguageskills.)

　　Second,tostudyabroadcanhelptwocountry'scommunication.communicationisaveryimportantwayforourhumantosolvetheconflictbetweenus,andtopromotethefriendshipbetweenus.learningEnglishcanhelpustocommunicatewithenglish-speakingcountry,similarly,learningothercountry'sculturecanhelpustocommunicatewiththeirpeople,furthermore,thecommunicationbetweentwocountryscanbeachievedonlybythepeopleofbothcountry.

　　2.(Besides,afirsthandunderstandingofaforeignculturehelpspavingthewayformutualunderstandingandcommunication.Bondsoffriendshipamongnationsandthepeoplecanbecreatedthroughtheexchangeofideasandsharingofexperience.)

　　Third,wecanlearntheadvantageofothercountry.insomefields,ourcountry'stechnologyisnotthebest,thatisthereasonwhyweshouldlearnfromother,thestudentscangotothosecountryandlearnthishi-techwhichisourcountrylackof,aftertheirfinishingstudy,theycanreturnandserveourcountry.

　　3.(Lastbutnotleast,developingcountriescanbeeventuallytechnologicallycapablebyparticipatingineducationalprogramsfortechnologytransfer.Undersuchprograms,studentswhogoabroadtostudyarefront-linepioneerstoacquireadvancedskills,knowledge,technologies,methodsofmanufacturingandfacilitiesintheirareaofstudy.Thesestudentswillbecontributingtheirinsight,expertise,knowledgeandskillstothecountryoforiginupontheirreturnhome.）

　　这个是我觉得你可以在第三段中加上的一个例子：

　　Forexample,someIndiangraduatesacquiredvaluableandtransferableskillswhentheirworkedinSiliconValleyfirmsintheUnitedStatesandwentbacktostarttheirownfirmsbringingemploymenttothelocalpeople.)

　　PS:youngstudentsgoabroadtostudycanopentheireyes这句话是否正确,应该用going还是go

　　Go正确,不过我会选择用一下这个句子来表达“学生出国留学以便增加见识”的意思：-

　　Studentsgoabroadtostudysothattheycanwidentheirhorizons.

　　Studentschoosetostudyabroadbecausetheywanttowidentheirhorizons.