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　　【英语作文改正,这个作文能得多少分（100满分）?Nowadays,withtheimprovementofthepeople'slivingstandardandevery-changingtheadvanceofhumancivilization,onephenomenoncallforpeople'sattentionthatmoreandmorepeoplechoi】

　　英语作文改正,这个作文能得多少分（100满分）?

　　Nowadays,withtheimprovementofthepeople'slivingstandardandevery-changingtheadvanceofhumancivilization,onephenomenoncallforpeople'sattentionthatmoreandmorepeoplechoiceonlineshopping.

　　Asamatteroffacteveryonehashisownreasonforhischoice.peoplewouldlikeonlineshoppingratherthanother'swayshopping.Tothemonlineshoppingisofgreatherimportanceinthatitcansavethemtime.Butnoteveryonesharesthesamesopinion.others,hatetheonlineshopping,theythinkthatonlineshoppingsometimesisacheat,andthelowpricemadepeopleindulgein.

　　Asauniversitystudent,I'mconcernedifallaspectintotheaccount,onlineshoppingseemstobeawisechoiceandwiththetechnologydevelopitwillanirresistibletrendinmodernsociety.therefore,Isuggestthatpeopleshouldcarefulitifyouwantpleasureandconvenienceusetheway,onlyinthiswaycanwewithouttheconcernofbeingcheated.

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2020-08-13 08:27

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刘馨月

　　语法错误还是蛮多的,这样你即使有亮点也被掩盖了.尤其到后面,错误太多.50分不能再多了.这文还有一个硬伤,就是有几句中式英文的句子.

2020-08-13 08:31:37

谷爱昱

　　哈哈，那以你的能力能改好？改个满分的

2020-08-13 08:34:59

刘馨月

　　满分无力能及，只是尽力改好。第一段call->callschoice->chooseevery-changing不知道你想表达什么，反正没这个词，也许是everchanging吧，当然不用也是可以的。第二段wouldlike不好改成perferto，other‘swayshopping明显有误（'s乱用）改成otherwaysofshopping。Tothem这么用不好，可以改成it做形式主语的句子itisofgreatimportanceforthemthatonlineshoppingcansavetime.same怎么就加了s，others太笼统不好，用somepeople更好点，后面加上however顺承更好，the就不要加了。cheat是动词，即使用作名词要可数只能指骗子，可以改成akindofcheating，the不要乱加，made时态是怎么了，makes啊！后面该用过去分词的倒不用了改成indulgedin。第三段iftakingallaspectsintoaccount，and之后句式极其混乱，withthetechnologydevelopmentitwillbecomeanirresistibletrend……suggest后面should用对了，动词呢？加上be而且careful后面加of，直接去掉usetheway前面改成pleasantandconvenientservice最后一句话想用倒装，句式对了，但是少动词，canweshoponlinerelaxedly……其实我觉得你打字错误较多而并非真的是文有这么多错，不过既然放在网上就认真一点。

2020-08-13 08:37:38

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