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　　我想写封电子邮件给外国朋友,不知道哪里需要修改,希望各位英语达人提出宝贵的意见~

　　James,

　　HI!YournameandE-mailareinPenfriendsite.Idon'tknowwhoyouare,butIwouldliketobeyourpenfriend.IamaChinesegirl,mynameisTanJiaqi,myEnglishnameisAlice.Iamthirteenyearsold.Howoldareyou?Ihavelongblackhairandyellowskin,whataboutyou?Ilikepaintingverymuch!

　　IlivewithmyparentsinGuangzhou,China.IcanwriteEnglish,butIcan'tspeakitverywell,so,IhopeIcanincreasemyEnglishduringthecommunicationwithyou.

　　Bestwishes

　　Alice