请英语高手帮我点评我的这篇英语四级作文,1：本社团的主要活动内容2：参加本社团的好处3：如何加入本社团WelcometojointheSunshinevolunteerclub!Ifyouhavealoveheart,yououghttojoinus.Wewilllookin

　　请英语高手帮我点评我的这篇英语四级作文,

　　1：本社团的主要活动内容

　　2：参加本社团的好处

　　3：如何加入本社团

　　WelcometojointheSunshinevolunteerclub!Ifyouhavealoveheart,yououghttojoinus.Wewilllookintheolderthosewholivealoneandtalkwiththem.Inaddition,wealsogototheprimaryschooltoteachtheminterestingknowledge,forexample,theinterestingmath,scientificknowledgeandthestormofintelligence.

　　TheSunshinevolunteerclubwillprovideaopportunitytoletyouhelpthepeoplewhoarepoorordisabled.Ithinktheactivitieswillimproveyourabilityofactionortalk.Furthermore,peoplewillworktogetherandyouwilllearnsomethinghowtogetalongwellwithothers.Finally,youwillmakesomefriendsinourclub.

　　Ifyouwanttojoinourclub,justcallusat691800orsendanemailtoSunshinevolunteer@hstc.edu.cn,withinformationattached.Andafteroneweek,youwillbeamemberofourclub.Sodon'thesitate,joinus.