goodafternoon,mynameis***,itisagreathonorthatIcanhavetheopportunityforthisinterview,iwouldliketoanswerwhateveryouaskaboutthisjob,andihopethatmyworkexperiencecanbesuitableforthepositionthatyouareaskingfor.

　　Iam23yearsold,borninxiamenandthismonthigraduatedfromxiamenUniversityandhavereceivedmybachelordegree.

　　Inthepastfouryears,Ispentmostofmytimetostudy,soiacquiredbasicknowledgeforMarketingintheory.Besides,IhaveattendedlotsofPractice...(whatarethey),ThroughtheseworkingexperienceIhaveadeeplyunderstandingofmymajor.(whatareyourmajor)

　　Nowiwillintroducemyselfbriefly

　　Iam26yearsold,borninshandongprovince.

　　Iwasgraduatedfromqingdaouniversity.mymajoriselectronic.andigotmybachelordegreeaftermygraduationintheyearof2003.

　　Ispendmostofmytimeonstudy,ihavepassedCET4/6.andihaveacquiredbasicknowledgeofmymajorduringmyschooltime.

　　InJuly2003,IbeginworkforasmallprivatecompanyasatechnicalsupportengineerinQingDaocity.BecauseI'mcapableofmoreresponsibilities,soIdecidedtochangemyjob.

　　AndinAugust2004,IleftQingDaotoBeiJingandworkedforaforeignenterpriseasaautomationsoftwaretestengineer.BecauseIwanttochangemyworkingenvironment,I'dliketofindajobwhichismorechallenging.MoroverMotorolaisaglobalcompany,soIfeelIcangainthemostfromworkinginthiskindofcompanyennvironment.ThatisthereasonwhyIcomeheretocompeteforthisposition.

　　IthinkI'magoodteamplayerandI'mapersonofgreathonestytoothers.AlsoIamabletoworkundergreatpressure.

　　That’sall.Thankyouforgivingmethechance.

　　It'sapleasuretomeetyouall-->It'smypleasure

　　I'mqualifiedforthisinterview.Qualified不是这样用的

　　(Aqualifieddoctor)

　　简单的一句I'amgrateful(表示感谢)tobechosenforthisinterview就可以了

　　Iamgraduatefromshanghaidonghuivocationalandtechnicalschool.Graduate已是动词.-->Igraduatedfrom...(最好加上年份,如lastyear,in2006等)

　　major-->majored表示过去式

　　"Isreadingthetechnicalcollege,studiesisthebusinessmanagementspecialty?"不明白...我猜你是想说

　　-->Ispecializedinbusinessmanagement.我专攻商业管理

　　Ionceworkedinthetransportagentcompanyasthemerchandiser.Once可以省略,我反而认为如能说出这职业为你带来了什么好处会重要些,即你在处事方面有何改善,学懂了什么技能,知识,沟通技巧,这些会对你要应徵的这份工作有什么好处,而令主持面试者觉得你有能力胜任这工作

　　-->Havingworkedinatransportationagency,(用a,因之前没有提过是哪一公司,用agency,已代表了这机抅,用transportation,因我看到外国的都是这么叫)Ihavelearnttocooperatewith(合作)oneanother,Ihaveimprovedmycommunicationskillswhichwillhelpmeworkefficiently.(有效率地)

　　adaptivecapacityisstrong-->myadaptivecapacityishigh

　　"itisserioustowork?"不明白...还是你是想说这对工作很重要?

　　-->Thesequalities(素质)areveryimportant.

　　myhobbyisatwritting,reading,singingandtraveling.-->Myhobbiesarewriting,reading,singingandtraveling.

　　或地道些-->Writing,reading,singingandtravelingaremyfavorites(所爱好的).Ienjoythemverymuch.

　　Iamveryinterestedinthisposition这句感觉怪怪的...英文来说只是表现出你对这工作感兴趣

　　-->Ireallywouldliketobea/an___(工作名称),whichcancertainly(肯定)providemewithmorechancesandchallenges(chances和challenges都是可以数的,而整句都能让人感到你的热诚)