求修改PersonalStatement希望哪位英语较好的朋友能帮忙看一下可能会比较多我最终会加到200分的之前已经修改过一次大的问题应该不会有多少主要看看细节有什么不妥.Towhomitmayconcern,Iama

　　求修改PersonalStatement

　　希望哪位英语较好的朋友能帮忙看一下

　　可能会比较多我最终会加到200分的

　　之前已经修改过一次大的问题应该不会有多少主要看看细节有什么不妥.

　　Towhomitmayconcern,

　　IamaChineseundergraduatefromxxxUniversitywhichisamemberofthe211Projectofeliteresearch-ledinstitutionsinChina,mymajorisInternationalTrade.Afterlongdeliberation,IsetmymindontheprogramofMasterinAccountingandFinanceinyouruniversity.

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　　Apartfromtheacademicstudyatuniversity,Ialsodidalotofinternshipinthesparetime.FromJune2008toDecember2008IworkedforXXXXasanaccountantintern.I’veknowntheaccountancyservicewellduringthisstage,whichisveryusefultomyfuturestudyandwork.

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