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  【考研作文修改各种意见,虚心接受,Asissymbolicallyportrayedinthecartoon,aboilinghotpotembodiesdifferentkindsofculture,bothmodernandancient,Chineseandforeign,suchasKongfu,LaoShe,Einstein,PekingOperaandsoforth.Thecap】

  考研作文修改

  各种意见,虚心接受,

  Asissymbolicallyportrayedinthecartoon,aboilinghotpotembodiesdifferentkindsofculture,

  bothmodernandancient,Chineseandforeign,suchasKongfu,LaoShe,Einstein,PekingOperaandsoforth.Thecaptionindicates,”theculturehotpotisnotonlydeliciousbutalsonutritious”.

  Undoubtedly,wecandeducefromthepicturethatthecartoonististryingtoattractourattentiontothediversityoftheculture.Therearenumerousbenefitsforourselves,andIwouldonlyexploreonlytwoofthemostimportantones.First,asfortheculturehotpotisdelicious,manyforeignculturearefreshtous,whichwecanchangeourtastetoafterbeingtiredofouroldfashioninabidtocreatenewpowertodothingsmoreenthusiastically.Second,thenutritionoftheculturehotpotisofgreatsignificancetoourgrowth.Onlywhenwehavethewellunderstandingofdifferentculturecanweconquerthegreatamoutdifficultieswhichwewilencounterwhenweworkwithforeigners.

  Asacollegestudent,Ifirmlybelievethatweshouldtakeadvantageofthebenefitsresultingfromthediversityofculture.Itisbelievedthatabrightfuturewillawaitusifwecansparenoefforttopromotethediversityofthecuture.Onlyinthiswaycanourcountry,ourpeopleenjoyarevival.

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2019-05-01 19:50
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李晓雪

  写得真好.比我当年考研时写得好多了.

  有几个地方,谈不上修改,只是探讨一下.

  1、manyforeignculturearefreshtous,whichwecanchangeourtastetoafterbeingtiredofouroldfashioninabidtocreatenewpowertodothingsmoreenthusiastically.

  culture有两个含义:(1)thecustomsandbeliefs,art,wayoflifeandsocialrganizationofaparticularcountryorgroup.这个cultrue是不可数名词.(2)acountry,group,etc.withitsownbeliefs,etc.这个cultrue是可数名词.

  贵文应当是第一种culture,所以没有用复数形式.但前面直接用many限制就不合适了.建议改成manykindsofforeignculture.

  whichwecanchangeourtasteto强调的是“we”,但文中讲的是外国文化对我们的影响,强调的是“foreignculture”.所以改成whichcanchangeourtaste语意更顺些.

  2、Onlywhenwehavethewellunderstandingofdifferentculturecanweconquerthegreatamoutdifficultieswhichwewilencounterwhenweworkwithforeigners.

  well是副词,应改成good.

  differentculture改成differentcultures.不可数名词表示种类,要用复数.

  amout后面要加of.

  3、Onlyinthiswaycanourcountry,ourpeopleenjoyarevival.

  改成Onlyinthiswaycanourcountry,ourpeopleandourcultureitselfenjoyarevival.

2019-05-01 19:53:30

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