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  英语高手帮我修改考研作文.急考研看图作文具体就是一个人站在海上的船上拿着一张票.另一个人拿着行李站在岸上看着船.下面有一行字:机遇就像一艘不定期的船,只有准备充分的人才能上

  英语高手帮我修改考研作文.急

  考研看图作文

  具体就是一个人站在海上的船上拿着一张票.另一个人拿着行李站在岸上看着船.

  下面有一行字:机遇就像一艘不定期的船,只有准备充分的人才能上船.

  Asisvividlydepictedinthedrawing,thereisashiponthesea.Oneman,holdingaticket,entersintotheship.However,theotherwhodoesnothaveaticketonlycanwatchthefurtherandfurthershipwithunsatisfied.Thecaptionreads,“Opportunityislikeashipwhichisonlyreadyforamanwithticket.”

  Theartistusesthisuniquemetaphorinordertotellusameaningfulphilosophy,tomakeadequatepreparesforchances,oflife.Manyfamouspeoplecanalwaysturncommonplacethingstoadvantage,andthencatchararechance.ThemostpersuasiveexampleisJayChou,aChina-renownedpopmusicstar.Manysongssignedbyhimwerenotacceptedbysomestarsintheearlytime.Hisbossgiveshimaopportunitytoperformthesesongsbyhimself.Finally,hecatchesthechance,andsucceeds.

  Frommyperspective,itisnecessaryforustomakeadequatepreparationsbeforeopportunitiescoming.Althoughitmaymakesomepeoplefeelboringandineffective,thehugeadvantagesemergewiththecomingofopportunities.(这句感觉太低级了,能不能修改的高级点谢谢!)Onlythesepeoplewithfullpreparationscanholdfasttochances.

  有没有能改进的地方,还有建议.

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2019-05-03 00:08
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傅雄刚

  Youhavegoodvocabulary.Youhaveusedwordslikevividly,metaphor,however,yoursentencestruatureislousy.Considermy:=

  oneman,holdingaticketisstandingonthedepartureship

  theotherdoesnothaveaticketcanonlywatchtheshipsailingfutherandfurtheraway

  tomakeadequatepreparationandnottorelyonchance

  Manyfamouspeoplehadalwaysturncommonideatotheiradvantageandcaptureonthistopropelthemselvestosuccess.

  Onlythesepeoplewithfullpreparationcancatchtherareopportunityorchancefast

2019-05-03 00:13:35
盖凌云

  你好,谢谢你的建议。不过我还想请教:....,tomakeadequatepreparesforchances,oflife.根据你的建议改成....,tomakeadequatepreparationandnottorelyonchance,oflife.是这样吗?我不太确定插入语的用法。插入语,动词不定式可以充当吗?还望不吝赐教!:)

2019-05-03 00:17:15
傅雄刚

  prepares是动词,preparation是名词nottorelyonchance,不要依赖机遇

2019-05-03 00:19:59
盖凌云

  插入语,动词不定式可以充当吗?

2019-05-03 00:20:57
傅雄刚

  ok

2019-05-03 00:22:47

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