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  【写了一个博士英文留学自荐信,水平太差,太中国化求高手相助,使其像一篇地道的留学自荐信,急用,DearProfessor:IamRobbinZhong(Zhongyan-qian),male,borninGuizhou.IwasenrolledbyilinMedicalCollegein2004,maj】

  写了一个博士英文留学自荐信,水平太差,太中国化求高手相助,使其像一篇地道的留学自荐信,急用,

  DearProfessor:

  IamRobbinZhong(Zhongyan-qian),male,borninGuizhou.IwasenrolledbyilinMedicalCollegein2004,majoringinBiomedicalEngineering.Afterfouryearsofstudy,Inotonlyacquiredknowledgeandskillsbutalsoobtainedavigorouswayofacademicthinkingof.However,Ialsofeelstronglylackofknowledge,soin2008,aftergraduationIwenttoUniversityofShanghaiforScienceandTechnology(USST)tostudyassiduouslyasagraduate.Becauseoftheloveforthefieldofbiomedicalengineering,especiallyforbiomedicalelectronics,Ididnotchangemymajorduringthegraduatebuttocontinuelearninginthisfield.IamabouttograduateinMarch2011.

  Whilestudyingcoursesrequiredatschool,Ihavehosted3projectsandparticipatedinone.Also,Itookpartinsomesocialactivitiesinmysparetimetobemuchmoreabletoachievebetterandsocialstandards.

  Summingupmylifeincollege,forthelimitationofknowledge,abilitiesandconditionsatthattime,Icouldn’tdosomespecificandin-depthwork.Whileinmylifeofgraduate,basedonthesolidfoundationonelectronics,IhavethechancetoparticipateinanumberofprojectsonbiologicaltissueconductedbymyinstructorsthroughwhichIcanuseengineeringmeanstotrulysolvethemedicalproblemssothatbiomedicalengineeringsystemisfurtherimproved.Andmysubjectofgraduateisgraduallyshiftedfrompureelectronicapplicationstothatwhichdealswithpracticalengineeringproblems.Inthiswaycanitdisplaysareale-sciencereflecttherelativeadvantageofmeansofimplementationofotherprojects.

  Ihadalsowonseveralscholarships,andtookpartinNationalUndergraduateElectronicDesignContesttwicerankingthethirdplaceprovincially.Inthesecondclassroom,IhaveusedVbasafrontpanelAccessasdatabasedevelopmentofthe“officeequipmentmanagementsystem”.Inaddition,Ihavealotofhobbieslikechess,badminton,forbadmintonIwasawardedinthecompetition.AlthoughImajorinelectronics,IhaveastronginterestinotherrelatedfieldsinwhichIbelieveIhavetheabilitytodoitwell.Long-termtraininghasmademecheerful,humorous,energetic,liketothink,goodatsummarizingandsolvingproble

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2019-05-03 11:57
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胡宾

  你的英文水平很不错.作为一封自荐信,完全可以.

  建议在细节方面再仔细检查一下,如

  标点:在butalso之前最好有逗号;

  时态:毕业时间在2011,应该用将来时;

  inmylifeofgraduate,basedonthesolidfoundationonelectronics,Ihavethechanceto...

  应该用had

  另外,life的用法也值得商榷,不如用collegelife,或aftergraduation等等.

  Ihadalsowonseveralscholarships时态应该用现在完成时Ihave...

  数据库课题名称中的首字母应该大写.

  另外,However,Ihavemyweaknessofbeingimpetuous.或许可以再斟酌一下.

  例如,可改为:

  IknowIhavesomeshortcomingssuchasbeingimpetuousatimpropertime,andIamtryingtocorrectit.

  总之,建议在细节上仔细检查一下.

  祝你顺利!

2019-05-03 11:59:05

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