whenpeoplemovetoanothercountry,someofthemdecidetofollowthecustomsofthenewcountry.othersprefertokeeptheirowncustoms.comparethesetwo.whichonedoyouprefer

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　　Recently,anincreasingnumberofstudentswhoareattendingtouniversityinforeigncountry(要用众数countries).Butthereisaproblem,whichwecannot(cannot是一个字)ignore,thatisthedifferentcustoms.Itisimportantbecauseifhe(因为这里说我是students众数要改用they)stillkepthis(their)oldcustomstoanothercountry,he(they)wouldface(要加with)alotofdifficulties.Butontheotherhand,(remaininghis要改为maintaining)ownhabitsmaylethim(them)feelcomfortable,forwhichhehas(theyhave)beenusedtoit.soitraisesaquestion.Whetherpeopleneedtobesubjectedtothecustomsofforeigncountry(多过一个国家countries)orjustkeepingtheirownhabit.Inmychoice,Iwillchooseadaptingtothenewcustoms.

　　Firstly,peopledenyfollowingthenewcustomsthatwillbeadverseforcommunicationwithlocalpeople.Differentculturediffersonperson’sbehavior.Insomecasesthathe(they)maythinkhimself’s(their)behaviorsjustperfectlynormal,butintheviewofothers,theythink(heisanoddguy改为theyarejustoddballs),forhis(their)eccentricact(s).Thenpeoplewouldnotwillingtotalkwithhim(them).He(they)maybelievethatotherpeopleis(are)alsobizarresothathe(they)justimmerses(要加in)his(their)ownworld.Andtheresultisthatthelackofcommunication(s).

　　Second,thefurtherstepofthedevoidofcommunication(s)isharmfulforhis(their)healthy.Itcaninducephycologicalproblems,suchasdepression,autismandetc.thereisawaytoavoidtheseproblemsthrough(去掉the)friends’s(friends')help.Butyouhaveprobablyforgottenthathowhe(they)couldmakefriendswithoutcommunicatingwithoneanother.)

　　Finally,onthecontrarytowhohas(have)rejectednewcustoms.Ifhe(they)madehimself(themselves)toacceptnewcustoms,notonlytheproblemswhichhas(have)beenlistedabovewouldnothappen,butalsohis(their)(ken?不懂这个字,你是想表达甚麼)andknowledges(knowledge)wouldbeenhancedbecausecustomsrootinlocalculture.He(They)couldlearnalotaboutculturebystudyingtheircustoms.

　　Therearestillnumerousadvantagesbyfollowingthecustomsofthenewcountry(countries).I(couldnot要改为won'tbe)abletolistallofthem(加out)(去掉inawhile).So,inconclusion,IwilldefinitelydragmyselfintothenewcustomswhenImovetoanothercountry.Whynot?

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