楼上的,“以前要3天”很明显是过去时啊,一袋面也不是"apackofnoodles",单复数也有问题.
Myhometown,Jinan,isthecapitalofShandongprovince.Inrecentyears,greatchangeshavetakenplaceinmyhometown.Intheaspectofenvironment,theroadsgetwiderandtherebecomemorehighways.Itusedtotake3daysforthedeliveryfromJinantoShanghai,nowitonlytakes2days.Intheaspectofdailylife,therearemoreconveniencestoresnowthanthepastinJinan.Wehadtospendhalfanhouronthebustriptobuyabagofflourinthepast,butnowwecanbuyitinthecommunitystores,whichisveryconvenience.(也可说wecanconveniencelybuyitinthecommunitystores)Anotherimportantchangeisthatthemonthlybasicsalaryhasbeenincreasedfrom600yuanin2006to1200yuan.Ithinkduetothesechanges,people'slivesgetsmoreconvenienceandhappy.
补充一下,我个人感觉第三句“从环境上来说”不太合适,改成“从交通运输上来说”更好,这样就是intheaspectoftransportation