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  英语高手看看我这篇文章有没有错误,我要演讲了,谢谢!下面就是我的演讲稿,看看有什么错误和不对的地方,希望帮我改正~everyday,askyourselfsomequestionsifyouwanttorelaxyourmind,spendthewholedayac

  英语高手看看我这篇文章有没有错误,我要演讲了,谢谢!

  下面就是我的演讲稿,看看有什么错误和不对的地方,希望帮我改正~

  everyday,askyourselfsomequestions

  ifyouwanttorelaxyourmind,spendthewholedayactively,itisnecessarytoaskyourselftenquestionseveryday,thesequestionsmaygiveuspowerandnicemood.

  1whatdoihave?(我拥有什么?怎么翻译?这句貌似不太对.)weusuallyworriedaboutthingsthatwehavelost,butweneverseethethingswehaveowned,suchashealth,wecanlisten,wecansee,wecanloveandbelove,everyday,wehavefoodtoeat...andsoon.wealwayssayasyoulostasyouknowthetresure,solet'scherrisheverymomentwitheveryonenow!

  2whatshouldifellproud?(我应该为什么骄傲,怎么翻译?)theanwseris---yoursucess,allofthesucessallmeanthatyoumadegreatprogress,youcanfeelproudwhenyousolveaproblem,youcanalsofeelhappywhenyouhelpafriend,youcanbeproudofallofthem.

  3whatshouldifeelgrateful?wecanfeelgratefultoeverythingandeveryone.becausetheytoldusmanylogic(他们教会我们很多道理怎么翻译?)everydayweliveontheearthisalsoavaluablegiftforus.

  4howcanibeactive?wecanplanthetimetabletodosomeactivethings,forexample,youcanmakeaphonecallwithyouroldfriendorencourageeachother,youshouldkeepsmileonyourface,andgooutsidetohavearelaxing,andsoon.

  5whichproblemcaniworkout?whenyoumeetadifficulty,tryyourbesttosolveyourproblem.youcanbemorebrave!

  6canithrowawaythestressinthepast?youmaydosometingwrongorhaveanunhappyexperienceinthepast,isuggestyoucanthinkoveritandthenyoushouldforgetthefailure,youarethebest!

  everydaythinkabout(我今天过的好吗,怎么翻译?)andeverydayaskyourselfsomequestions.thenletliveswillbemeaningfulandactive!tryyourbesttolivehappily`结尾怎么结啊?

  好了,写的很不好,望高手多多修改谢谢!

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  写的不错,我的一些看法(改在原文上了)

  Everyday,askyourselfsomequestions:

  ifyouwanttorelaxyourselfandspendthewholedayactively,itisnecessarytoaskyourselftenquestionseveryday,thesequestionsmay

  giveyouenergyandhappyday.

  注:并列关系应该用and隔开,而不是逗号.只有六个问题,何来tenquestions?别一会you一会us的,多乱呀.

  你是想说力量于好心情吧,那样表达不太好.

  1whatdoialredyhave?(我拥有什么?怎么翻译?这句貌似不太对.)weusuallyworriedaboutthingsthatwelost,butweneverseethethingswe

  haveowned,suchashealth,wecanlisten,wecansee,wecanloveandbelove,everyday,wehavefoodtoeatandsoon.wealwayssayasyou

  lostsoyouknowthetresure,whydon'twecherrisheverymomentwithothersnow!

  这一段的第二句有点乱,省略号不能跟andsoon用在一起.

  2whatshallibeproudof?(我应该为什么骄傲,怎么翻译?)theanwseris---yoursucess,allthesucessmeanthatyoumadegreat

  progress,youcanfeelproudwhenyousolveaproblem,youcanalsofeelhappywhenyouhelpafriend,youcanbeproudofallofthem.

  3whoshallifeelgratefulto?weshallbegratefultoeverythingandeveryone.becauseallofthemteachmealotofthings.(他们教会我们很

  多道理怎么翻译?)everydayweliveontheearthisalsoavaluablegiftforus.

  有一些搭配的错误,另外道理不用刻意翻出来,everyday是副词,应该用everyday.

  4howcanibeactive?youcanmakethetimetabletodosomeactivethings,forexample,youcanmakeaphonecallwithyouroldfriendand

  encourageeachother,youshouldkeepsmileonourface,andgooutsidetohavearelaxingandsoon.

  5whichproblemcaniworkout?whenyoumeetadifficulty,tryyourbesttosolveyourproblem.youcanbemorebrave!

  6canigetridofthestressinthepast?youmaydosometingwrongorhaveanunhappyexperienceinthepast,isuggestyoucanthinkitover

  andthenyoushouldforgetthefailure,youarethebest!

  everydaythinkaboutifIhadanice(orifIspentanactiveday)(我今天过的好吗,怎么翻译?)andeverydayaskyourselfsomequestions.then

  lifewillbemeaningfulandactive!tryyourbesttolivehappily`结尾怎么结啊?

  总的毛病还有老用逗号,层次不清,我基本没改这些问题,还有一会第一人称,一会第二人称的,混乱.其他方面都还可以,为了尽量尊重你的原义,我没有大

  幅度的修改.

2020-09-11 17:42:52

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