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  高三英语作文II.GuidedWriting:作为孩子应该做些家务,既能够减轻父母负担,也能锻炼自己独立生活.你的作文必须包括以下内容:1.说明家长工作辛苦2.你学会了做哪些家务3.你的感受.Witht

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  II.GuidedWriting:作为孩子应该做些家务,既能够减轻父母负担,也能锻炼自己独立生活.你的作文必须包括以下内容:1.说明家长工作辛苦2.你学会了做哪些家务3.你的感受.Withthearrivalofmodernera,loveinmanyyoungs'eyesbecomemoreandmoreunnecessary.Inmyopinion,Itcan'tbedeniedthatparentsgiveuslife.However,aswegrownup,theburdenonourparentsbecamemoreandmoreheavily.Myfamilyisaveryordinaryfamily,andmyparentshavegeneraljobs.Frequently,whenIgotoschool,theygooutatthesametimeearly.Whentheygobackhome,theywillprepareforsupperwithoutanyrest.Aftersupper,theywasbusywithhousework.Until11o'clock,theyhavetimetohavearestbuttoolate.Iwantstodosomethingforthem.I'mafraidIcan'tdocomplexthings.Nevertheless,simplethingscanbecompetent.Ilearnthowtotidytherooms,buyfoodtocookandespeciallytakecareofmyself.PlanisperfectbutIt'sdifficulttomove.Butwithaperiodoftimetoadjustmyself,Ifoundtheskillstodealwithvarietyofproblems.IgainalotandI'mproudofmyself.Thehappyexpressionontheirfaceencourageme.Parentstaughtusgrowandlove,whatweshoulddomostisfeelgrateful.Weshoulddowhatwecandonownotplanwhattodointhefuture.修改就可以了,谢谢

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2019-05-20 16:18
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潘玮炜

  亲,你的文章写得很好很用心!

  祝诸事如意,鹏程万里!

  Withthearrivalofmodernera,loveinmanyyoungs'eyesbecomemoreandmoreunnecessary.Inmyopinion,Itcan'tbedeniedthatparentsgiveuslife.However(这里没有转反转的逻辑关系,因此不能用however.建议把however改成Thepityis),aswegrownup,theburdenonourparents

  becamemoreandmoreheavily(这里要用形容词,不能用heavily,要用heavy).

  Myfamilyisaveryordinaryfamily,andmyparentshavegeneraljobs.Frequently,whenIgotoschool,theygooutatthesametimeearly(atthesametime与early在逻辑上是矛盾的.建议将此句改为,theyhavealreadygoneforworking).

  Whentheygobackhome,theywillprepareforsupperwithoutanyrest.Aftersupper,theywas(注意单复数,这里要用were)

  busywithhousework(缺少冠词,要么用thehousework,要么用houseworks).

  Until11o'clock,theyhavetimetohavearestbuttoolate.(逻辑上不对.翻译成中文就是“直到11点,他们有时间休息,但是太晚了”.建议改为,Theyhavenotimetorelaxuntil11p.m.,butthistimeisreallytoolate)

  Iwants(我是第一人称,直接说want,不能说wants)

  todosomethingforthem.(上一句和下一句之间要有过渡的逻辑词,建议加一个however在这里)I'mafraidIcan'tdocomplexthings.

  Nevertheless,simplethingscanbecompetent.Ilearnthowtotidytherooms,(缺少必句内链接词,建议加上andto)buyfoodtocookandespeciallytakecareofmyself.

  PlanisperfectbutIt'sdifficulttomove(move不能用来表示执行计划,建议此处用deliver.todelivertheplan是固定搭配).

  Butwithaperiodoftimetoadjustmyself,Ifoundtheskillstodealwith(缺少a.avarietyof是固定搭配)varietyofproblems.

  Igain(时态要一致.亲前面用一般过去式,这里就要一致.用gained)alotandI'mproudofmyself.

  Thehappyexpressionontheirface(单复数要一致.这里有两张脸,用faces)encourage(encouraged)me.

  Parentstaughtusgrowandlove(句子成分不完整.shitaughtushowtogrowupandtolove),

  whatweshoulddomostisfeelgrateful(1.most在这里的适用错误,建议删除.2.缺少动词.这里要用whatweshoulddoistofeelgrateful).

  Weshoulddowhatwecandonownot(把not换成insteadof)planwhattodointhefuture.

2019-05-20 16:22:25

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