帮忙修改一篇IELTS大作文顺便帮帮改改分--Thesedays,wecaneasilyfindthatsomepeopleensurethatitistooyoungtogotoschoolforchildrenbeforesix-yearold.Butothersbelievethatitisimportantforyoungchildrentogotos

　　帮忙修改一篇IELTS大作文顺便帮帮改改分--

　　Thesedays,wecaneasilyfindthatsomepeopleensurethatitistooyoungtogotoschoolforchildrenbeforesix-yearold.Butothersbelievethatitisimportantforyoungchildrentogotoschoolassoonaspossible

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　　Itismyconsideredviewthatchildrenshouldallowedtostayathomeandplaywithfriendsuntiltheyaresixorsevenyearsold

　　Theprimaryreasonisstudy.Foryoungchildren,themostimmediatefactorisunderstandingability.Weknowthedon’thaveahighleaveunderstandingabilitywhenwearealittlebaby.

　　Moreover,youngchildrenneedmoreandmoreplayingwithfriendsforcultivatecreativeability,individuality,socialabilityandect.Thereasonwhyweshouldmakechildrenstayhomebeforesixorseventearsold.

　　Nevertheless,thatwemakechildrengotoschoolasearlyascanteachmoreandmorescholarship.Butthekidscan’treallyrealizewhatischildhood.

　　Tosummarise,thattheyoungchildrenstayhomeuntilsixorsevenyearsoldiswelladvisedinmypersonalidea.