这篇文章我肯定有写过差不多的.

　　IbelieveIt’satruth“Whenacountrydevelopsitstechnology,thetraditionalskillandwaysoflifedieout.Itispointlesstotryandkeepthemalive.”Becausethat’soneofstepsduringthewholehistory,noonecanstopit.

　　Thehumansocietyalwaysgoforward,oncethenewtechnologyappearedtheyjustreplacedtheoldone.Becuase,thenewtechnologywillimproveourlifeandcreatenewwaysoflife.Actuallyhumanbeingsinventnewtechnologyforthemselvesandalwaystrytoimprovethem,sothiscausetheoldtechnologiesarenotgoodasnewones.Thisisthereasonwhythere’snopointtokeeptraditionalskillexcepttheyreallyespecialorwehaveotherpurposeandhadtokeepit.Forexample,somemuseumsarebuildthousandsorhundredsyearsagoandtheywillstillbeprotecedfromgenerationtogeneration.Frommuseumshumanswillknowthehistoriesandtradiatoncultures.Theywillprovidepeoplemoreideasabouthowtodevelopingtheirowncountryinthefuture.Whattheyalldoaimtoencouragepeopletoinventnewtechnologytoservicepeople.

　　Lickeachcoinshavetwosides,Iknowsomepeoplereallythinkweshouldkeepsometraditionalskillandwaysoflife.(这句看不懂!）Myideaistheyaregoodatoldtechnologyorusedtooldwaysoflife,Theydon’thaveabilityortoolazytolearnnewtechnologyandtheyjustwantkeeptheoldone.Sotheysaidweshouldkeepthemforsomereasons.ButtherealreasoniswhatIsaid,andthisisthehumannatureweallknowitverywell.

　　你的文章感觉很奇怪.我都不知道怎么帮你改.我稍微帮你一些语句修改了一些.没有修改总体的结构或者你的意思.

　　不过这篇文章比较讨巧的是写两面论.

　　你的文章只能打到5分.可能更低些.

　　你写了两面论,可是没有突出两面论.然后呢你的语句比较混乱.有些我都不知道你要说些什么.一下子否定,一下又拣起来再说一下.让人看得不是一气合成.

　　而且最后没有结论.这点会让人感觉你的文章没有写完!这个可能会让老外5分都不给你.没有写完的文章他们分数都给很低!

　　有问题欢迎丢纸头!:)