Oldbuildingsoccupyalargespaceinsomelong-historicalcountries.Itrepresentsthecultureandlifestyleofanation.Somepeoplesupporttoprotecttheseoldbuildingsinordertoremembering(应该remember)ourancestorsandstrengthening(应该strengthen)culturaldiversityofthecommunities.Otherwise(otherwise用错了,应用ontheotherhand/side),somepeople（加are）againstitbecausetheoldbuildingshaveinfluencedthedevelopmentoftheurbansprawl.Inmypointofview,theexistenceoftheoldbuildingshasmoreadvantagesthandisadvantages.

　　-开篇观点明确.用词还好,少数语法错误,第一印象为6分以上,7.5以下）

　　Oldbuildingsarethespecialsymbolofanarea.Peopleareremindedbythosebuildingstoknowtheirfantasticculture.Likewise,oldbuildingshavetheirresearchablevaluesandarchitecturalvalues.Thedesignersinmodernsocity（拼错了society）canlearnfromthosegreatbuildingstobuildsomefunctionalandfabulousmodernbuildings.Aswellasthehistorian(aswellas用错了,用additionally吧),theycangetmoreinformationaboutthelifestylesandthecommentoftheirlives.

　　-第二段也写得不错.个别词法错误,但是总体不影响理解.看来是6.5-7.5的水平,继续看.

　　Furthermore,oldbuildingscanmakeagreatcontributiontothetourismindustry.Forinstance,somepeopleareinterestedintheGreatWall,somearecuriousabouttheBigBen,othersmaythinktheSummerPalaceMuseumisperfect.Thus,theywilltraveltosomeplaceswhichhavetheirfavouriteoldbuildings.Obviously,theincreasingnumberoftouristowetotheoldbuildings（这句话语法没错,也好理解,但是nativespeakers不会这么说）.Theyattractmanytravellerstoappreciatetheold-fashionedbuildings.Thegovernmentmakealargenumberofmoneyfromtheoldbuildingsindiectly（拼错了）.Therefore,itisnodoubtthatweshouldnotdestory（拼错了）theseoldbuildings.Onthecontrary,weshouldputmoremoneyintotheoldbuildingprotection.

　　-还是有拼写错误.语句总体来说没有太多毛病,但是句法词法使用偏于单调,不够丰富.不到7.5的水平.

　　Tosumup,oldbuildingsareregardedasthemostpreciousthingsforthenations.Weshouldbeproudoftheoldbuildings,becausetheyprovesthegreathistoryofthehumanbeings.

　　-最后评分：6.5-7分.运气好,7分,运气不好,6.5分,但是明显高于6分的水平.

　　-你的逻辑、文章组织都没有多大的问题.背些样句套话,还有用些正式些的词语,很快就能提高整体书平了.比如investinmaintenanceoftraditionalarchitecture和putmoremoneyintotheoldbuildingprotection就是两个档次的文字水平.

　　-再接再厉!