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  【雅思作文修改雅思大作文求修改剑桥7TEST3一定要给个评分哦哪些方面欠缺用词结构?Jobsatisfactionisahot-debatedissueofdiscussionbecausepeoplespendalotofhoursinworking.Anddefinately,whetherajobis】

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  雅思大作文求修改剑桥7TEST3一定要给个评分哦哪些方面欠缺用词结构?

  Jobsatisfactionisahot-debatedissueofdiscussionbecausepeoplespendalotofhoursinworking.Anddefinately,whetherajobissatisfiedisaveryessentialfactortothewellbeingofthatperson.

  Firstofall,therearekindsoffactorswhichcontributetojobsatisfaction.Inmy

  opinion,thesalarybehavesanimportantfactorbecausewhypeopleworkisjustthereasonforabasicfinancialneed.Ahighsalarywillabsulutelyprovidepeoplewithasenseoffulfillment.Secondly,theenvironmentalsoinfluentpeople'sattitudetowardstheirjobs.Forexample,staffwhoworkinginGooglearefreefromsomeruleswhichrestrictworkersinothercompanies.What'smore,whatkindofjobexactlyisandhowhardtheworkshouldbedonebothshouldbeconsidered.Andifaworkeraredoingtheirsworktotallywithinterests.Thenthestressfromworkismuchlesstosomeextentwhilestressishugeinothercompanies.Inadditon,boringjobsareindeedunwelcomedbyanyonebecauseitwouldhaveabadimpactonpeople'snormallife.

  However,therecan'tbenodisadvantagesinanytypeofjob.Solet'sbacktorealistic

  topic.Everyonesearchforanidealisticjob.Butactually,howrealisticistheexpectionofjobsatisfaction.Iconsideritdependsontheirabilitiesandhowmuchprofitstheycanmaketothecompany.Forinstance,someworkersplaysanunneccesaryroleincompanyandtheycontributelittle.Asaresult,salarycan'tbehighandtheyhavetofinishalotofboringassignments.Sotheexpectionwillbeeventuallyalittleunrealisticforthem.

  Inanutshell,Ithinkwhatpositionwewillbeinthefutureandhowsatisfiedourjobs

  willbedependonwhatwedotoday.Imeanweshouldstudymoreandmakeabigefforttoearnabeautifulfuture.

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2020-09-18 17:27
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唐恒永

  第一段satisfying

  第二段inmyopinion太平庸可以换其他的如frommyperspective(角度)

  很多第三人称单数没加sprovidesinfluentsstaffworkingin或staffwhoworkin

  whatkindofjobexactlyis这句看不懂.

  therecan'tbenodisadvantagesinanytypeofjob翻译成中文也很别扭,你为难考官了,不要以为这样的反问句就能加分,

  总体来说不错的6.5的水平吧,前半部分挺好后半部分有点高中生的水平哦,句式太简单了,太直白了,不是不好,要多换换,让考官眼前一亮,但也不要改成前面那句,

  总之,加油,看多点高分作文,89分哪些,你会很自卑的~

2020-09-18 17:31:03

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