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　　雅思作文求批改,后天的考试,临时抱佛脚了,麻烦大概说下这篇能拿几分,完全自己写的,木有套模板啊~要能说下中间的错误就更好了.原谅我木有提前给悬赏,Q:Moreandmorepeoplechoosetoworkorstudy

　　雅思作文求批改,

　　后天的考试,临时抱佛脚了,麻烦大概说下这篇能拿几分,完全自己写的,木有套模板啊~要能说下中间的错误就更好了.原谅我木有提前给悬赏,

　　Q:Moreandmorepeoplechoosetoworkorstudyathomebecausecomputersaremuchcheapernowadays.Isthisapositiveornegetivetrend,andwhat’syouroponion?

　　A:Anincreasinglycommonissueinmanypartoftheworldthesedaysisthatpeople(adultsandchildren)prefertoworkorstudyathomeratherthangotooffices.Insuchacase,somepeoplethinkitisanegetivetrendwhileothersbelievethatitisapositivetrend.Iagreewiththelatteroponion.

　　Tothosewhosupportworkinoffices,Iwouldliketopointthatworksandstudentshavetospendtimeontheirwaytotheoffice(/school),itisawasteofourtime.ForexampleIspenthalfanhouronmywaytotheschooleveryday.ButIdowantusethetimetodoexercises.Schoollifeistiredandboring,studentshavenotimetodosports,especiallyseniorhighschoolstudents.Butifwestudyathome,wecanusethetimeweusedtogotoschooltodosomeexcisestokeepfit.Wecanalsostudybetterifwearehealthy.

　　Anotherreasonwhypeopleliketoworkathomeprobabellyisthatstayathomeismoreconvinientandrelaxed.Wewillnotforgetbringourhomework,documentandsoon.Wecandoeverythingwedoatschool(/office),evenchatwithourfriends,butwecan’tdosomething,likesleepingalittlewhilewhenwearereallytiredatschool,becauseofrules.AndIdosurethattheremustbesomeonewedon’twanttomeetinoffice,suchasboss.Workathomecanhelpusaviodmeetingthem.

　　Inconclusion,althoughpeoplehavetoworkinofficenow,butIbelievethatonedaywecanworkinourownplace,andmorepeoplewouldliketoworkintheirhome.

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2020-11-18 22:40

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陈希军

　　To(最好用For)thosewhosupportworking(work在此应用动名词形式)inoffices,Iwouldliketopoint（指出,pointout）thatworks（workers）andstudentshavetospendtimeontheirwaytotheoffice(/school),it（which）isawasteofour（去掉our）time.ForexampleIspenthalfanhouronmywaytotheschooleveryday.ButIdowant（to）usethetimetodoexercises.Schoollifeistired（tiring）andboring,（however,）studentshavenotimetodosports,（whichis）especially（truefor）seniorhighschoolstudents.Butifwestudyathome,wecanusethetimeweusedtogotoschooltodosomeexcisestokeepfit.Wecanalso(去掉also听起来更通顺)studybetterifwearehealthy.

　　Anotherreasonwhypeopleliketoworkathomeprobabellyis（isprobably）thatstay（staying）athomeismoreconvinientandrelaxed.Wewillnotforgetbring（忘记带.应该把forgetbring改成leave）ourhomework,documentandsoon.Wecandoeverythingwedoatschool(/office),evenchatwithourfriends,butwecan’tdosomething,（改成things）likesleeping（去掉ing,注意和can’t后面的do保持一致）alittlewhilewhenwearereallytiredatschool,becauseofrules.AndIdosure（ensure或直接把do改成be动词）thattheremustbesomeonewedon’twanttomeetinoffice,suchasboss.Work（working）athomecanhelpusaviodmeetingthem.

　　Inconclusion,althoughpeoplehavetoworkinofficenow,but（去掉but）Ibelievethatonedaywecanworkinourownplace,andmorepeoplewouldliketoworkintheirhome（homes.）

2020-11-18 22:41:38

李群辉

　　那大概能拿几分？

2020-11-18 22:46:05

陈希军

　　我只是帮修改语法方面的问题，分数倒没概念。

2020-11-18 22:48:42

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