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  希望高手能把句子改的更漂亮更高级点同时改正里面的错误谢谢!Forthreeyears,anewTVprogramappearedinChina,thegameAquaticwithfoammodules.Itincludesphysicalactivitieswhichalreadyexistingsuchasrockclimbin

  希望高手能把句子改的更漂亮更高级点同时改正里面的错误谢谢!

  Forthreeyears,anewTVprogramappearedinChina,thegameAquaticwithfoammodules.Itincludesphysicalactivitieswhichalreadyexistingsuchasrockclimbing,diving,swimming,running,jumping...Alltheseactivitiesconstitutetheobstaclecourse,butwhatmakesitspecialandinnovativeisthattheseactivitiesareperformedonthewater.ThisTVprogramwonagreatsuccessinChinawithalargepublic.ManyChineseTVstationshaveopenedsimilarprogramstomotifythecoursesandrules.Thisprogramisnovelandhasbroughtanewformofsport.OriginallytheideaisverysimplytoencouragepeopletoexerciseinthecontextoftheBeijingOlympicGamesin2008,andithasachievedatremendoussuccessbythetelecast,thegameisnowconsideredasportinChinawithitsownrègles.Ourmicroprojectisinspiredbythisnewconcept,andwewishtowesternizeit,likeamodernintercityandinnovative.Wewanttobuildourcompanywhichofferthesportscoursesadjustablesonthewater.Ourgoalistocreateanewhobbythatisbasedonthecreationofasportsserviceaquafunnamed:Aquamoov

  Thisistosetupourfoamycourseontopoflakes,ponds,sea.Thegoalistoofferseveralcoursessportivesandrecreationals.ThecourseconsistofcompetitivebarrierswhichisbuiltbyobstaclesworthyofOlympicdisciplines:thehedges,thehorizontalbar,theswimming...Ourgoalistoplaysportswhileincreasingpleasure.Whydosports?Tohavefun,keepfit,loseweight,managestress...Indeed,studiesshowthatpleasureistheprimarymotivationamongyoungpeopleforsport.Soourcustomersareparticularlyyoungpeople,whatarethebenefitsofourbusiness.Thecourseconsistsnormally5to7Barriers.Eachobstaclehasitsownname,theparticipantsfallintothewateraspunishment.

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2020-11-20 21:38
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孟庆国

  楼主,帮你改正了一些小错误,请鉴定

  第一段

  第一行Forthreeyears,anewTVprogramappearedinChina,thegameAquaticwithfoammodules.Itincludesphysicalactivitieswhichalreadyexistingsuchasrockclimbing,diving,swimming,running,jumping...改为Forthreeyears,anewTVprogramhasappearedinChina,whichisthegameAquaticwithfoammodules.Itincludesphysicalactivitiessuchasrockclimbing,diving,swimming,running,jumpingandsooncurrently

  第五行motify应该是modify,但最好改成imitate

  第九行wewishtowesternizeit,likeamodernintercityandinnovative.改为wewishtowesternittobeamodern,intercityandinnovativeprogram

  Wewanttobuildourcompanywhichofferthesportscoursesadjustablesonthewater.改为Wewanttobuildourcompanywhichoffersthesportscoursesadjustableonthewater.

  Ourgoalistocreateanewhobbythatisbasedonthecreationofasportsserviceaquafunnamed:Aquamoov改为Ourgoalistocreateanewhobbythatisbasedonthecreationofasportsservicelikeaquafun,named:Aquamoov

  第二段

  第一行Thegoalistoofferseveralcoursessportivesandrecreationals.改为Thegoalistoofferseveralcoursessportiveandrecreational.

  第二行ThecourseconsistofcompetitivebarrierswhichisbuiltbyobstaclesworthyofOlympicdisciplines:thehedges,thehorizontalbar,theswimming...改为ThecourseconsistsofcompetitivebarrierswhichisbuiltbyobstacleswithOlympicdisciplines:thehedges,thehorizontalbar,theswimming...

  最后Soourcustomersareparticularlyyoungpeople,whatarethebenefitsofourbusiness.Thecourseconsistsnormally5to7Barriers.改为Soourcustomersareparticularlyyoungpeople,whoprovidethebenefitsofourbusiness.Thecourseconsistsofnormally5to7Barriers.

  希望能帮到你!

2020-11-20 21:39:05

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