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　　【请帮忙修改下面的英语作文Sheisacutegirlandturning18yearsoldthisyear.Shejustcelebratedher18thbirthdayinlastmonth.Chinaistheplacewheresheoncelived.ShewasborninChina,too.ShehasbeeninAmericamorethantwoyear】

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　　Sheisacutegirlandturning18yearsoldthisyear.Shejustcelebratedher18thbirthdayinlastmonth.Chinaistheplacewheresheoncelived.ShewasborninChina,too.ShehasbeeninAmericamorethantwoyears.ShelikesJazzmusic.Badmintonisherfavoritesport.Therearefourpeopleinherfamily,Herfather,hermother,hersisterandherself.Whenshemeetsdifficulties,hersisterswillcometocomforther,helphimalot.Herfatherisafunnyperson.Ithinkhercharacterlikeherfather.Theybothhavesenseofhumor.EvaisherbestfriendwhensheinChina.SelenaisherfirstbestfriendinLosAngelesseniorhighschool.Theyoftenhungouttogether.ShewantstotraveltoSouthKorea,becauseshelikesKorea’sfamousstars.ShealsolikeTaiwanallkindsofdeliciousfood.ShewanttogotovisitmanyfriendsinNewYork.

　　.WhenIfeeldown,shealwayscaresaboutme.Ireallyappreciateher.Ihopewewillbebestfriendforeverandourfriendshipwillforeverandever.

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2020-11-20 22:01

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秦洁

　　你这个文章里的错误还是不少的啊,可以改的地方太多.

　　Sheisacutegirlandturning18yearsoldthisyear.Shejustcelebratedher18thbirthdaylastmonth.ShewasborninChinaandlivedthereuntileshewas16(是么?）.ShecametotheUStwoyearsago.

　　ShelikesJazzmusic,andbadmintonisherfavoritesport.Shehasanicesisterwhohashelpedherthroughmanydifficulties.Herfatherisafunnypersonwhereherpersonalityinheritfrom.Ilovethewonderfulsenseofhumorofherfamily.

　　EvaisherbestfriendwhenshewasinChina.SelenaisherfirstbestfriendinLosAngelesseniorhighschool.Theyoftenhangouttogether.Shehasplantovisitseveralplavesrecently.ShewantstotraveltoSouthKoreatomeetKorea’spopstars.ShealsolikeTaiwanandtotrythoseabundantdeliciousfood.ShewanttogotovisitmanyfriendsinNewYork.

　　.WhenIfeeldown,shealwayscaresaboutme.Ireallyappreciateherasalife-timefriends.Ihopewewillbebestfriendsforever.

　　整体来说段落很简单,也很质朴.但是很多地方重复的太多.最后一句话尤其是.

2020-11-20 22:03:57

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