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  英语短文改错MyHometownMyhometownisasmallcountrysidetown.AsIdidn’tgobacktomyhometownsince1992.soIdon’tknowwhat’spopulationinit.Therehassomehills,ariver,somefields.WhenIwasyoung,Iverylikedtoclimbthe

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  MyHometown

  Myhometownisasmallcountrysidetown.AsIdidn’tgobacktomyhometownsince1992.soIdon’tknowwhat’spopulationinit.Therehassomehills,ariver,somefields.WhenIwasyoung,Iverylikedtoclimbthehillnearmyhome.SometimesIclimbedthehillwithmyclassmate.Whenwearrivedatthehilltop,wealwayshadrace,becauseallwantedtoknowwhowasfirst.Ialsorememberwhenwewenttoschool,wehadtopassriver.Sometimeswedidn’tcrossedthebridge,weswimedthewater..Inholidaywecouldcatchthesmallfishintheriver.HowagoodtimeIhad!

  IlikemyhometownmorethanthecitywhichIlive,butpeoplehereareverypoor.Becausewhenthechildrenonlyhavefinishedjuniormiddleschool,they’reparentforcedthemtoleaveschool,andgotocitiestofindwork.Andthatmakethehometownpoorerandpoorer.

  IthinkI’llcomebacktomyhometowntobuilditmoreandmorebeautifulafterfinishinguniversity.

  帮忙改下错.

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  MyHometown

  Myhometownisasmalltowninthecountryside.IhadnotbeentotheresinceIleftitin1992andthuswasnotsureaboutthepopulationthere.Ionlyrememberedthattherewasariver,somehillsandfields.WhenIwasachild,whatIlikethemostwasclimbingthehillneartomyhouse.Sometimes,myclassmatewilljoininandwhenwearrivedatthetopofthehill,wewouldalwayshvearace,wewilluseourfullstrengthbecausenoonewantedtolosetoeachother.Ialsorememberedthatwehadtocrossariverinordertoreachtheschool.Werarelyusethebridgebutinstead,choosedtoswimover.Duringtheholidays,wewouldcatchthesmallfishintheriver.WhatafunchildhoodIhad!

  IlikemyhometownmorethanthecityIliveinnow.However,thepeopleinmyhometownareverypoor.Childrenwereforcedtogotoworkinthecitiesoncetheycomletedtheireducationinthemiddleschools.Thisdidnothelpbutinstead,madethetownevenmorepoorerthanbefore.

  IfIhadthechance,IhopethatIcanreturntomyhometownonedayandcontributemyeffortstomakeitabeautifulsmalltown.

  IthinkI’llcomebacktomyhometowntobuilditmoreandmorebeautifulafterfinishinguniversity.

  我几乎是重新写了一遍唉.你的作文有很多语法错误,而且语言组织能力有点弱.不过你的单词量其实还蛮大的说.

  记得多读英文书,看看别人如何组织语言,久而久之你也就学会了.不然像你这篇文其实很有趣,却全败在你的文笔上了.

2020-11-27 07:21:59

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