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　　帮我纠正下这篇speech的语法错误,GoodmorningeveryoneI’mverygladtostandhereandgiveyouashortspeech.Todaymytopicis“mygreatsister”.Mysisterisolder3yearsthanme,butIdolearnalotfromher.Becausemyparentsare

　　帮我纠正下这篇speech的语法错误,

　　GoodmorningeveryoneI’mverygladtostandhereandgiveyouashortspeech.Todaymytopicis“mygreatsister”.

　　Mysisterisolder3yearsthanme,butIdolearnalotfromher.Becausemyparentsaretoobusytocareaboutus,inmymemoryIalwaysspentmytimewithmysisterandshegavemeallherlovetotakecareofme.Sheteachmewhotostudy,howtorespecttheold,howtobeagoodgirlandsoon.Itcanbesaidthatnomysister,nomeheretoday.Idoappreciatemysisterinmydeepestheart.

　　Mysisterisreallyagoodgirl.Itisshewhotaughtmetohelpother.Icanrememberathingthathappenedtous.ItwasaSundayafternoon,mysisterandIwenttoapark.Whenwewerewaitingforthebustogohome,weheardaboywhohadsameagewithmecryingatthebusstation.Mysistercameuptohimandlearnedofthattheboyhadlosthismoneyandcouldn’tgettohishome.Mysisterlookedatmeandsaid:Sophia,howpoorthisboy”“Yes,andwearepoortoo.”Isaid.Mysistersaid:let’shavehimok?“How”Iaskedcuriously.“Givehimthemoneytohelphimtogohome.”“Butweonlyhaveenoughtogohome”Ican’tagreetodoit.Mysistersmiledandtoldmethat”dear,wecanwalkhomeasthoughitachancetoexercise.Noonlycanithelpthispoorboy,butalsowecandosomeexercise.Ok?”Atlastwewalkedhomehappily.AndIwasveryproudofmysister,evenme.

　　Mysisterhadeverdoneagreatthingforme.

　　Itisatruestory.Whenwearechildren,myfamilywasverypoor.Itwasanewtermforthestudentstogobacktoschool.Butmyfamilydidn’thaveenoughmoneytosupportustogotoschooltogether.Whenmyfatherwasinadilemma,mysister,withasmileonherface,toldmyfather:DadtookSophiatoschool.Iamfine.Afterhearingwhatmysistersaid,mymothercan’thelptocrying.EverytimeIthinkofthismoment,Ialwaysthanksformysisterthousandoftimeinmyheart.AndeverytimeItalkedaboutthistomysister,shealwayssaidthat:Becauseyouaremysister.

　　Thanksformygreatsister.Itisshewhogavemethechancetostudy.Itisshewhoteachesmeeverything.Itisshewhoalwayswithme.Sheisgoingtomarrythenextyear.AlthoughIdon’twanttoseparatefromher,Ireallywanthertobethehappiestbrideintheworld.Thanksformygreatsister.Andthanksallofyousharingmystories.Thanks!

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2020-12-18 06:59

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胡智宏

　　着实费了我不少劲啊...废话不说,该后的在这里：

　　Goodmorningeveryone.TodayI’mverygladtostandhereandgiveyouashortspeech,onthetopic“mygreatsister”.

　　Mysisterisonlythreeyearsolderthanme,butIdolearnalotfromher.Becausemyparentsaretoobusytotakecareofus,Ihavespentmuchofmytimewithmysisterandshetherefore,takestheroleofmyguardian.Sheteachesmewhotostudy,howtorespecttheold,howtobeagoodgirlandsoon.ItismysisterwhohasshapedwhatIamnow.Idoappreciatemysisterfrommydeepestheart.

　　Mysisterisreallyagoodgirl(kindperson).Itisshewhotaughtmetohelpothers(sheteachesmetobealtruisticandgiveoutmyhandwhenothersneedhelp).Icanstillrememberonethingthathappenedtous.ItwasaSundayafternoon,mysisterandIwenttoapark.Whenwewerewaitingforthebustogohome,weheardaboy,whohadsameageasme,cryingatthebusstation.Mysistercametohimandlearnedthattheboyhadlosthismoneyandcouldn’treturnhome.Mysisterlookedatmeandsaid:“‘whatapoorboy”“Yes,butwearepoortoo.”Isaid.Yetmysistersaid:let’shelphimok?“How”Iaskedcuriously.“Givehimsomemoneysohecangobackhome.”“Butweonlyhaveenoughtogohome”Icouldnotagreewithher.Mysistersmiledandtoldmethat”dear,wecanwalkhome;justtakeitasachancetoexercise.Besides,Noonlycanithelpthispoorboy,butalsowecandosomeexercise.Ok?”Atlastwewalkedhomehappily,andIwasveryproudofmysister.

　　Itisarealstory.WhenIwasachild,myfamilywasverypoor.Itwasanewtermforthestudentstogobacktoschool.Butmyfamilydidn’thaveenoughmoneytosupportmysisterandmetogotoschooltogether.Myfatherwasinadilemma.Mysister,however,withasmileonherface,toldmyfather:DadtookSophiatoschool.Iamfine.Afterhearingwhatmysistersaid,mymothercan’thelpcrying.EverytimeIthinkofthismoment,Ialwaysthankmysisterthousandsoftimeinmyheart,forwhathehasdone.AndeverytimeItalkedaboutthistomysister,shealwayssaidthat:Becauseyouaremysister.

　　Thanksformygreatsister.Itisshewhogavemethechancetostudy.Itisshewhoteachesmeeverything.Itisshewhoisalwayswithme.Sheisgoingtogetmarriednextyear.AlthoughIdon’twanttobeseparatedfromher,Ireallywanthertobethehappiestbrideintheworld.Thanksformygreatsister.Andthanksallofyousharingmystories.Thanks!

　　建议作者注意减少使用Chinglish的表达方式

　　注：括号里的是修改建议

2020-12-18 07:03:28

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