这样写对吗..有错吗Hello!Everybody.Mynameis***.Ihaveahappyfamily.Therearethreepeopleinmyfamily.It'smymother,myfatherandI.Myfatherisa***(你爸爸的职业）,Helikesreadbooks.Mymotherisateacher,Sheworksveryhard

　　这样写对吗..有错吗

　　Hello!Everybody.Mynameis***.Ihaveahappyfamily.Therearethreepeopleinmyfamily.It'smymother,myfatherandI.Myfatherisa***(你爸爸的职业）,Helikesreadbooks.Mymotherisateacher,Sheworksveryhard.I'mastudent.I'm**(你的年龄）yearsold.Ilovemyfamily!

　　goodmorningeveryone.mynameisSusan.ihaveahappyfamily.welivesinQuanzhou.ihavetwograndmatherandtwograndfather.ihavenobrother.myfatherandmymatherareboss.theyworksveryhard.ilovemyfamily..大家看看有没有问题..后面突然说我爱这个家应该不会太突然吧.iwanttostudyverywellforenglish..有错吗因为我想出国怎么说..