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  帮忙看下我这篇短文有没有语法错误...作业在发给老师前我还不太放心,主要是语法和措辞方面,通顺不通顺之类的,Withrapiddevelopmentoftransportationandweaponstechnology,morecasualtieswereexperiencedtha

  帮忙看下我这篇短文有没有语法错误...

  作业在发给老师前我还不太放心,主要是语法和措辞方面,通顺不通顺之类的,

  Withrapiddevelopmentoftransportationandweaponstechnology,morecasualtieswereexperiencedthanever.TherewereseveralwartechnologiesbeingcreatedduringWWI,includingdirigibles,fieldguns,fighterplanes,submarines,andpoisongas.

  Dirigibleswereakindofairshipsfillingwithgas.GermanyuseditforseekingandbombingtaskswhileBritainusedsmallerframelessonestoprotecttheirshipsfromattackingbysubmarines.Also,Germany’s“BigBertha”artillerywasanexampleshowingbiggerfieldgunsplayedanimportantroleinattackingothercountriesinWWI.Often,theshellsbeingfiredwerefilledwithshrapnelandexplosives.Inaddition,fighterplaneswereusedtoattackinsteadoffindingtheenemy.Engineerseveninventedaninterruptersystemforavoidingchoppingofftheplane’sownwoodenpropeller.Germany’sU-boatswerealsomentionablebecauseittravelledfasterthanmostshipsandcrewcoulduseperiscopestoviewsituationsabovewater.Theyusedtorpedoestosinkenemyaswell.WhentheAllieswerediggingtrenches,Britaininventedtanksthatcouldbothattackandshelterwhilecrossingnoman’sland.Lastbutnotleast,poisongaswasfirstbeingusedbyGermanyduringWWI.Later,bothsidesusedphosgenegasandmustardgas.Forprotectingsoldiersfrompoisonousgas,anti-gasrespiratorwasinvented.

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2020-12-27 11:22
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刘朝霞

  听起来基本上都顺=)

  很好,

  记得每段开头要空一点

  and前面我不用逗号

  用Furthermore代替also会更好.

  Germany’sU-boatswerealsomentionablebecauseittravelledfasterthanmostshipsandcrewcoulduseperiscopestoviewsituationsabovewater.Theyusedtorpedoestosinkenemyaswell

  Germany'sU-boatsarealsoworthdiscussingbecausetheynotonlytravelfasterthanmostofthestandardshipsandtheavailableofperiscopesalsoallowsthemtoviewthesituationabovewater.Furthermore,theyalsousedtorpedoestosinkenemy('s)(battleships).

2020-12-27 11:23:35

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