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  【请专业人士帮我修改一下这篇英语作文。题目:假如你是班级里的生活委员,你发现班级里有些同学的生活习惯不是很健康。请你根据下面的提示写一篇70字左右的短文,为同学们如何养成】

  请专业人士帮我修改一下这篇英语作文。

  题目:

  假如你是班级里的生活委员,你发现班级里有些同学的生活习惯不是很健康。请你根据下面的提示写一篇70字左右的短文,为同学们如何养成健康的饮食习惯提些建议。

  提示:

  不良的饮食习惯建议

  不吃早餐保证一日三餐

  爱吃零食远离垃圾食品

  不吃水果.蔬菜饮食均衡

  很少运动每周参加三至四次体育活动

  原文:

  Ifindthatsomestudentsinourclassdon’t

  havehealthyeatinghobby.Now,letmetellyousomeadviceabouthowtokeep

  healthyeatinghobby.

  Somestudentsdon’tlikeeating

  breakfast,theythinkit’snotimportant.Butmanyscientistssaythat,”eating

  breakfastisthemostimportant.”Andagoodbreakfastcanhelpushaveagood

  begininthisday.Sowemustkeeponeatingthreemealseveryday.

  Ithinkweshouldbeawayfromthejunkfood

  andeatmorefruitandvegetablestokeephealthy.

  Andmany

  studentsexercisefewtimes.Weshouldplaysportsthreetofourtimesaweek.

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2020-01-16 21:57
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米智学

  初中你这个水平就不错了,但是hobby这个词不要滥用,我给你来个大学水平的.

  Asastaunchadvocateofhealthierliving,IfindmanystudentsinmyclassdevelopedbadeatinghabitswhichI'dliketoaddressbyprovidingsomeusefuladvices.

  Manystudentsoftenskiptheirbreakfastandbelieveitisfinetocompensatebyhavingmorelunchwhichisactuallynotthecase.Eatingthreemealwithappropriateamountandontimeiscrucialforhealthyliving.Alsoalotofmypeerslikeeatingsnacksandfastfoodowingtotheirgoodtastewhich,asmostadultsareawareof,iscompletewrong.AccordingtoWorldHealthOrganization,abalanceddietshouldincludeatleastmoderateservesoffruitandvegetables.

  Lastbutnotleast,manystudentsrarelyparticipateanysportsorphysicalactivitiesbasedontheexcusethattheycanconcentrateontheirstudy.Butthetruthisexerciseregularly,whichmeansatleastthreeorfourtimesaweek,canimproveone'sefficiencyoflearningenormously.Justliketheoldergenerationbelieved"Ahealthybodyisthefoundationforeverything!"

2020-01-16 21:58:15
孙丈福

  其实我希望宁能从拼写错误、知识点、词语及语法等方面评改做详细的点评,因为我还处于英语初学基础阶段,您写的有些东西我实在看不懂,对我目前学习没有太大帮助,如果您愿意接受我的建议继续评改的话,真是太感谢了。麻烦您了!

2020-01-16 22:03:06
米智学

  Ifindthatsomestudentsinourclassdon’t

  havehealthyeatinghobby.Now,letmetellyousomeadviceabouthowtokeep

  healthyeatinghobby.

  大问题没有,这里要用habit不能用hobby建议你看看字典里这两个词的解释

  Somestudentsdon’tlikeeating

  breakfast,theythinkit’snotimportant.Butmanyscientistssaythat,”eating

  breakfastisthemostimportant.”Andagoodbreakfastcanhelpushaveagood

  begininthisday.Sowemustkeeponeatingthreemealseveryday.

  大问题还是没有,但是中式表达太多,比如Andagoodbreakfastcanhelpushaveagood

  begininthisday.Sowemustkeeponeatingthreemealseveryday.可以改成Adecentbreakfastisgreattostartwiththeday,soweshouldkeepupthegoodhabitofeatingbreakfastontime.

2020-01-16 22:05:43

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