【帮忙看一下我这篇英语短文有没有什么严重的语法错误?短文是这样的：Jerryisflyingakiteinthepark.Hewasveryhappy.Butnowheissurprised.Becausethekitelineisborken.Hecannotget.HisclassmateMarycomesay:"Ic】

　　帮忙看一下我这篇英语短文有没有什么严重的语法错误?

　　短文是这样的：Jerryisflyingakiteinthepark.Hewasveryhappy.Butnowheissurprised.Becausethekitelineisborken.Hecannotget.HisclassmateMarycomesay:"Icanhelpyouwithyourtoit."Marystretchedherhands.ButMaryfellintothewater.Jerryisveryhappy.

　　有没有什么语法错误,比如过去式,现在进行时,这些,我搞不清啊!

　　大哥大姐帮下小妹忙!

　　是现在进行时，一楼，不是过去式，老师要求.

　　Jerryisflyingakiteinthepark.Heisveryhappy.Butnowheissurprised.Becausethekitelineisborken.Hecannotget.HisclassmateMarycomeandsay:"Icanhelpyouwithyourtoit."Marystretchedherhands.ButMaryfellintothewater.Jerryisveryhappy.