请帮我批改一下英语作文:我的幸福生活MyHappinessi-查字典问答网
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  请帮我批改一下英语作文:我的幸福生活MyHappinessinLifeWhatishappiness?Happinessiswhenyougetsickwhensomeonegivesyouacupofwateranddrugs.Onetime,Iwassickinbed.Hecamehomefromworkandsawmelikethis,andasked:"Ar

  请帮我批改一下英语作文:我的幸福生活

  MyHappinessinLife

  Whatishappiness?Happinessiswhenyougetsickwhensomeonegivesyouacupofwateranddrugs.

  Onetime,Iwassickinbed.Hecamehomefromworkandsawmelikethis,andasked:"Areyousick?"Isaid:"coldhaveafever."Helistenedtome,hepouredaglassofwater,tookadrugs,letmemedication,atthattime,Iamveryhappy!

  Inretrospect,happinessissosimplewhenyouaresickwhensomeonegivesyouacupofwateranddrugs,thisismyhappinessinlife.

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2020-01-20 15:54
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陈靖波

  你这作文更像是我的朋友,不是我的幸福生活.

  标点用的不好;

  叙事太过平淡

  没有大的语法错误,时态用的不错.

2020-01-20 15:58:08

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