Goodmorningeverybody!It'smygreathonortospeakhere,andIamverygladtosharemytopicwithyou.ThentodayI'dliketotalksomethingabouttheplanofmyfuturelifeinhighschool.

　　Youmaywonderhowtoplanourlifeduringthethreeyearsinhighschool?Asweallknow,thesetimecanberegardedasthemostimportantperiodinourlife.

　　Firstofall,Ithinkweshouldlearntorelaxwhenwedealwiththepressurefromthecompetitionandfurtherstudies,foragoodmentalitywillhelpusbalancethestudyandentertainmentandstimulateourpotential.Secondly,itisimportanttobeflexibleinstudy,insteadofbeinghidebound.You'llfindyoumaysavemoretimethanothersandwon'tbeafraidthequestionsarenotthesameasthoseyouhavepractisedformanytimes.Then,wearesupposedtoturnourwordsintoaction,becauseteachersinhighschoolwon'turgeyoutostudyanymorejustlikebefore.Therefore,wearepushedtoconsciouslylearn,andwemustraiseanyquestionswhenweareconfused,otherwise,noonewillhelpyouwiththem.Meanwhile,weshouldtryourbesttofinishourhomeworkontime.Finally,notonlyshouldwetreatourstudyseriously,butalsowecouldproperlyrelaxourselvesinoursparetime.

　　OK,thankyouforlistening,that'sall.

　　因为第三段开头你用到了relax但是看到hirebound我觉得你是想表达灵活学习所以和flexible做了搭配第一句就更改了一下和最后一句的意思似乎就有些重复了你可以再调整一下没有做太大的改动有些不适当的词汇和表达做了简单的修改可能也有一些问题可以提出来一起探讨一下整体来说写的不错~好好加油