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  【帮我看看我的英语文章有没有错误好吗?DearMr.Gates,Thankyouforyourletterwhichconcernaboutreinstallingandupgradingoursystem.Wehaveto,however,finalisesomedetailsinadvance.I’mafraidthatthedateyouplannedisunavai】

  帮我看看我的英语文章有没有错误好吗?

  DearMr.Gates,

  Thankyouforyourletterwhichconcernaboutreinstallingandupgradingoursystem.

  Wehaveto,however,finalisesomedetailsinadvance.

  I’mafraidthatthedateyouplannedisunavailablebecauseofouroriginallyplannedagenda.YourreschedulingwouldbehelpfulforusandIwanttoknowexactlyhowlongdoestheinstallmenttake?Furthermore,werequiretheengineertoinstallthesystemonweekendsothatitwillnoinfluenceourdailywork.

  Inaddition,weneedtokeepbothofthesystemsinourcompanytoinsurethesafetyforamonth.

  Ialsowanttoknowtheengineer’snameandnumberinordertoexchangeinformationefficiently.

  Lookforwardtoyourreply.

  Yourssincerely,

  GregCai

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2020-01-26 18:36
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  whichconcern(s)itwillno(t)influence两处句子有点长,用短句会显得自然一点.有些词汇重复的有点多,而且逻辑句全是"我们要干.是为了."建议稍微修改一下,逻辑可以使用".是necessary,因为我们要..."或者"...会很hel...

2020-01-26 18:38:30

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