【帮我看看这篇英语文章有什么问题,快DearLiuYun,Hi!IamXuXinyi.Anneismyenglishname.Iamhappytohaveanewpenpal.IliveinNingbowithmymomanddad,Ningboisabeautifulcity.WelcometoNingbo!Idon'thaveasisterorbrother】

　　帮我看看这篇英语文章有什么问题,快

　　DearLiuYun,

　　Hi!IamXuXinyi.Anneismyenglishname.Iamhappytohaveanewpenpal.IliveinNingbowithmymomanddad,Ningboisabeautifulcity.WelcometoNingbo!Idon'thaveasisterorbrother,butIhopetohaveone.Ihaveasmallfamily,butitiscoziness.Therearethreepeopleinmyfamily--father,motherandme.Mymotherisateacher.Sheworksinschool.Sheisslightlyfat,butsheisveryoptimistic.Sheoftensay:"laughandbefat."Shelikeslisteningtomusic.Andmyfatherisaboss.Heisverytallandthin.Ilovemyfather,becauseItakeafterone'sfather.Helikesbasketballverymuch,heisaloyalfans.Ilikeridingmybikeanddrewingpictures.Whataboutyou?

　　我都是自己写的,请各位英语好点的快点看看,帮我挑挑下,不好的句子删掉,有语病改掉,还可以适当的加些句子的,快,