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　　Sunshine

　　“Todayisbrutal,morebrutaltomorrow,thedayaftertomorrow【is】(willbe)beautiful,butthemajorityofpeople【dies】(willdie)ontomorrownight,【can’t】(unableto)seethenextday’ssunshine.”(Thesearethewordssaid)byJackMa,founderofAlibaba.Idohaveadream,thatonedayIwillbeabletopoint【on】(tothe)topofamountainandsaysomethinglike“【thatareaof】(those)housesaremine.”Thekeyistosurvivetodayandtomorrow.

　　Inordertolivetilltomorrow,Imustsurvivetoday.Idobelieveinfate,andIalsobelieveIhavethe【powertotrim】(abilitytomaster)myfate.BackwhenIwasinChina,【I’m】(Iwas)considered(as)someonethat【is】(was)hopeless,orsimplyascumbag,andIwas.Thankstomyfate,I’mhereinAmerica.

　　Itwasthefirstdayofmymiddleschool,I【knowIhavetwochoiceof】(knewIhadtwochoicesfor)myfuture,one【is】(was)tocontinuebeingascumbagorI【can】(could)shutmymouth,not【distracting】(todistractbutpayattentionto)theclass.【andlisten】Imademydecision【Ichoose】tolearn.Itwasmydecisionthatchangedmyfate；thefirsttime(that)myfaithbroughtme【a】goodnews.

　　It’sthefirstweekofmysenioryearinhighschool,Iwaslookingforwardto【join】(joining)aclubinhighschool；【turnsoutthereis】(itturnedoutthattherewas)anewclub【needs】(needing)morepeople,which【is】(wasthe)robotic(club).SoIwentand【askifIcan】(askedifIcould)join(theclub),andI【did】(could).Intheteamofrobotics,peoplewerediscussingwho【is】(was)goingtobewhat,Iwasexpecting【I’mgoing】tobetheprogrammerontheteam,butIwasn’t；insteadIwastheteamcaptain,because【I’m】(Iwas)theonlyperson【knows】(whoknew)howtowritecodesforrobot.NowI’mincollege,stillstruggling,knowingtomorrow【it’s】(is)goingtobebrutal,but【or】(forthesakeof)mydream,Imustsurvive.

　　Tomorrowistomorrow,Iliveintoday,Idon’tknowwhatwillhappentomorrow,butIcanplan(andprepare)forit,and【wishing】(wishfor)somethingbetter【will】(to)happen.Myplanfortomorrowissimplynottomakeanytrouble,anddoallmyworkashardasIcan,andtodothemcorrectly,（and）ontime.Whatusuallyhappensis,Iwillmakesometrouble,Ican’tdomostofmyworkashardasIcan,andIcan’tdoeverythingcorrectly,andItempttodelaythingsI’m【do】(doing),butI【survived】(managetosurvive).Iplannedtodoeverything,IplannedtodoeverythingthebestIcan,butIchooseonlytodoonesthatareimportanttome.Afterreading“The7habitsofhighlysuccessfulpeople”(written)byStephenR.Covey,I(have)learnedtochoosewhattodo,he【categorized】(categorizes)whattodoinfourareas,importantandurgent,important(but)noturgent,notimportantbuturgent,notimportant(and)noturgent.Iforcemyselfnottodothingsthatarenotimportant,andtrytoavoidthingsthatareimportantandurgent,becauseIshouldplanforit,soitwon’tbeurgent.Also(I)forcemyselfdoingthingsthat【is】(are)important(but)noturgent,that’swhatseparatespeoplefromsuccessfulandnotsuccessful.Forexamplereadingatextbook,thatit’simportant,butit’s(not)urgent,somostpeoplewouldmakeexcusenottodoit.Ichoosetodoit,soIwillmakemyselffitbetter【inthe】(to)societyandsurvive.That’showIpreparemyselftosurvivetomorrow.

　　AccordingtowhatJackMa(had)said,(the)majorityofpeople【dies】(woulddie)ontomorrow’sbrutalnight.Icon