Somepeoplethinkthatindividualsshouldshouldertheresponsibilitytosolveproblemsthatmayaffectthewholecommunity.Theyarguedthatwearebornwithcertainresponsibilitiesbecauseofournationalities（用假设显得繁琐）.However,it(指代不明)maysometimesservesasafalsenotionforindividualstofollow.Howcanwehandleanoverwhelmingproblemwith（少冠词）individuals'power?Theseeffortsarenormallyuselessor（will）evenincurnegativeeffects.

　　Somesevereproblemsaresooverwhelmingthatonesingleindividualcandonothingtohelp.（individualscanhelpnothingwiththeseproblems）Asanillustration,theGreatDepressionmayenlightenus.Itgoeswithoutsayingthatwhenthewholenationfallsintotrouble,governmentistheonlypowerthattocounton(句子顺序换了一下).PresidentRooseveltdidn'tletusdown.HecalleduppeopletobuildupdamsandotherinfrastructuresinordertoboomupAmericaneconomy.Butlet'sbearitinmind:It'sthewholecountrythatbackupthepresident,notjustRoosevelthimself.Inthiscase,wemayclearlydrawtheconclusionthatorganizationswiththeircollectivepower,canusuallyfunctionwellinthefaceofthreat.Thusit'saninsanedecisiontodevoteindividuals'infinitelysmallpowertotakingoverthewholeresponsibilityofacrisis.（例子这边的语法我就不改了,但是这个例子不够直接,可以跳过罗斯福一个人的那段,直入主题说是美国人民共同努力度过的危机.））

　　Sometimes,individuals'effort（s）maynotonlybeuselessbutalsoworsentheproblem.(notonly...butalso后面的东西没有平行).Someextremists（有点不清楚extremist到底extreme在哪里）mayserveasagoodexample.Thelastdecadesaw（完成时hasseen）humanswentthroughnumerousincreasinglyseriousenvironmentalproblems.Therefore,someextremistsgatheredup（todowhat?maybetoparade?）onthemainroad（s）ofsomecosmopolitancities,causingseveretrafficjamsinrushhours.Theyclaim(ed)thattheyare(were)fightingagainstpollutiontothenature,butactuallytheywerealsodoingbadthings.Thseyare(were)conflictingtheblameontheinnocent,leadingtolargeamountoflossofeverycitizen.Nevertheless,wecan'tblamethemfortheirnaiveideatoprotectthenature.Butit'sworthnotingthatindividuals'armlesseffortcanreallyshowitssideeffects(?这句话没看懂).我觉得例子还是不太贴切,因为extremists是gatherup的所以算不上individual吧

　　Afterviewingthecasesabove（两个词换了个位置）,wemaylearnalessonfromthem（指代不明,fromthem可以删掉）:Whenfacedwithseriousproblems,it'sthewholecommunity'sinsteadoftheindividuals'responsibilitytoprotectus（whydowehavetobeprotected?shouldn'tsolvingproblemsbetherightresponse?）.However,weshouldstillremember(that)individuals'effortsareindispensableto(for?)spread(ing)ourmoralvalue(s).Let'sbearthefamoussayinginmind(一篇文章里最好不要用两次bear...inmind):Wemaywalkwellbyourselves,butwewillwalkbettercollectively.

　　总体来说文章观点清晰,但是例子均不鲜明,且语法错误真的有点多哈,所以大概8分吧.以上仅供参考.