研究生面试自我介绍2之第二部分,求修改!如题,希望能改正：1.错误的地方2.不够生动的地方.习惯用法什么的.IntroducemyreasonforpreparingthepostgraduateexamDuringthepastfouryears,Ihavelearnedalotofp

　　研究生面试自我介绍2之第二部分,求修改!

　　如题,希望能改正：

　　1.错误的地方

　　2.不够生动的地方.习惯用法什么的.

　　Introducemyreasonforpreparingthepostgraduateexam

　　Duringthepastfouryears,Ihavelearnedalotofprofessionalknowledgeandpracticalskills,butgradually,Irealizeitisnotenough.Inmyopinion,furtherstudyisactuallyurgentformetorealizeandfinallyachieveself-value.Lifeisprecious,itisnecessarytocatchanyopportunityforself-development,especiallyinthecompetitivemodernsociety.Therefore,Iprefertogoonforfurthereducation.

　　Whydoyouchoosetostudyinourdepartment?

　　BecauseIreallylikeyourdepartmentofprofessional,cancometoourdepartmentlearningismydream,ifIgetachancetocometostudyhere,Iwanttocontinuetoreceiveprofessionaltraining,inordertodreams,I'llkeeptrying.

　　Aboutyourfutureplans：

　　IfIamadmittedmyidealresearchfield.IhopeIcanlearnknowledgeofcomputersystems,especiallyintheenvironmentalartdesignfield.Sincerely,Iwishistogetatoenvironmentalartdesignconceptofcompleteunderstanding.Ontheotherhand,Iwasdreamingoftheparticipationofrelevantprojectssomeofmymajor,forthisreason,Iwillgainmoreexperienceinpractice.AndIhopethatthroughcontinuetolearn,toexpandtheirknowledgebase.Inaword,Iwillinfuturestudylifeaftercarefullystudyandresearch.

　　Doyouhaveanyhobbies?

　　Inmysparetime,Ilikereading,collectCARDSandfriendexchanges,shopping,etc.

　　IalsolikeEnglishverymuch,IlikewatchingEnglishfilmsandlisteningtoEnglishsongsandlearnEnglishwell,Ibelievethatthereisstillalongway,however,Iwillnotgiveup,becauseIrealizethatEnglishisabridgeconnectingourcountryandtheoutsideworld.LearningEnglishisthemostdirectandeffectivemethodforintercourseanduseful,eachcountryandwewillputtheadvancedknowledgeandtechnologyfromothercountries.

　　第一部分同样求助,我想问题应该是在一起的

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　　另,本人就是英语差不知道怎么说才来提问的,如二楼那样讲倒是简单,但是我实在不知道怎么改好.请大大说清楚该怎样说才好.