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　　帮我改改这篇ENGLISH(英文)有哪些错,麻烦大家了.尽量说说错的原因和怎样修改.

　　hello,ereryone,letmeintroducemyself,mynameisLeungEddy,

　　youcancallmeEddyChak.IliveinPrinceEdward,iworkin

　　PrinceEdward,andistudyinPrinceEdward.soererybodysayme

　　luckythatsoneartodoererything.ithinkso,too.andithink

　　thebestisicansavemanymoney.

　　ilikeplayvolleyball,andsometimesiplayinFaHuiPark,ialsolikeplaycomputergames,butihadnotplaythatforalongtimewheniworkout.

　　mydreamisgotoTraveledinChina,nowihadbeenguangdongmanyplace,ithinktraveledmostinneedmanymanymoney,soihadworkhardtomoney,

　　andsaveinbanktoachievethat.iwillcarryon.

　　That'sall,thankyou.