初二英语作文:给汶川灾区的孩子写一封信,帮我点评一下我写的D-查字典问答网
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  初二英语作文:给汶川灾区的孩子写一封信,帮我点评一下我写的Dearchildren,Whereamazinghappened.OnMay12th,therewasaearthquakeinyourhometown.WhenIheardofthenews.Itmademeunbelievable,didn'tit?Iamreallysor

  初二英语作文:给汶川灾区的孩子写一封信,帮我点评一下我写的

  Dearchildren,

  Whereamazinghappened.OnMay12th,therewasaearthquakeinyourhometown.WhenIheardofthenews.Itmademeunbelievable,didn'tit?Iamreallysorrytohearthat.

  NowmanypeoplefromacrossChinaarehelpingyoubuildyourhometown.They'reallfriendlytoyou.aren'tthey?

  Duringtheearthquake,Ithinkeachofyouhasbecomeawarrior.Andthewarriordoesn'tafraidangthing.Ithinkyoucangetoveranydifficulties,can'tyou?

  Ifyoualsohavesomeproblems.Youcancallmeat0532-87654321.

  iwilltrymybesttohelpyou.

  Don'tworry!Ibelievethingswillbefantasticsoon.

  Bestwishes

  Yours,

  Mike

  希望大家提一点好意见,我们期末考试很有可能考这篇作文

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2020-03-02 09:26
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葛恒清

  不错

2020-03-02 09:29:32
蒲维

  Good!!

2020-03-02 09:33:52
任鸿

  总的来说不错,感情也很真挚,亲的英语蛮不错的,我帮你看了几个地方,仅供参考

  Dearchildren(用friends比较好)

  Whereamazinghappened.OnMay12th,therewasaearthquakeinyourhometown.WhenIheardof(of可以不要了)thenews,Itmademeunbelievable(这个词这么用不太好,最好是说itshockedmealot),didn'tit?Iamreallysorrytohearthat.

  NowmanypeoplefromacrossChinaarehelpingyoubuildyourhometown.They'reallfriendlytoyou.aren'tthey?

  Duringtheearthquake,Ithinkeachofyouhasbecomeawarrior.Andthewarriordoesn'tafraidanything.Ithinkyoucangetoveranydifficulties,can'tyou?(这一段用的反问句有点多,最好把句式转换一下,)

  Ifyoualsohavesomeproblems.(这一句可以改成ifyouneedanyhelp)Youcancallmeat0532-87654321.

  iwilltrymybesttohelpyou.

  Don'tworry!Ibelievethingswillbefantastic(应该改成allright,地震嘛,怎么能变得fantastic呢?这里应当是同情的语气哈)soon.

  Bestwishes

  Yours,

  Mike

2020-03-02 09:36:22
曹兰兰

  Dearfriends,

  Whereamazinghappened.OnMay12th,therewasaearthquakeinyourhometown.WhenIheardthenews.Icouldn'tbelieve,Iamsosorrytohearthat.

  Now,manypeoplefromacrossChinaarehelpingyoubuildyourhometown.They'reallfriendlytoyou.aren'tthey?

  Duringtheearthquake,Ithinkeachofyouhasbecomeawarrior.Andthewarriordoesn'tafraidangthing.SoIamsureyoucangetoveranydifficulties!

  Iamtryingmybesttohelpyou.

  Don'tworry!Wemustbelievethateverythingswillbeallrightsoon.

  Bestwishes

  Yours,

  Mike

  在原基础上改了一下下

2020-03-02 09:39:29

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