【英语作文修改志愿者日要到了,学校又要组织志愿者献爱心活动.请回顾一下去年你在IVD做了那些事情,并根据自己的爱好及特长选择一项IVDiscomingagain,nowIstillrememberthemeaningfulthingswedidlas】

　　英语作文修改志愿者日要到了,学校又要组织志愿者献爱心活动.请回顾一下去年你在IVD做了那些事情,并根据自己的爱好及特长选择一项

　　IVDiscomingagain,nowIstillrememberthemeaningfulthingswedidlastyear.

　　Lastyear,myclassmatesandIspentanafternoonvisitingthelocalhomefortheelderly.Wesangsongsandplayedgameswiththeoldpeople.Duringourvisit,thehomewasfullofthesoundoflaughter.Someofthemwereinpoorhealth,sotheycouldn’tgooutsideandthevisitsbyusbroughtsunshineintotheirlives.

　　Forthisyear’sIVD,Icameupwithaplan.WewillgototheOrphanageandwrapcolorfulpackagesfilledwithtoys,clothes,andschoolsuppliers,eachwithachild’sname.Iwantallofthemtoknowtheyarespecialandweren’tforgotten.Icanimaginewhentheyopentheirpackages,theirfacesbeamandtheirbrightsmileslightuptheroom.

　　Inmyview,doingvolunteerworkisagreatwaytoexploredifferentcareersandmademeexperiencethatgivingisreceiving.Iknowthatwhenyouhelpothers,youbecomelikeapebblethrownintoapond.Witheachrippleyoucreate,youspreadlovethatcontinuestogive.

　　希望老师帮忙修改一下这篇作文的时态、语法问题,以及看看这两篇作文是否有地方写得不全面什么的,总感觉详略有些问题,观点写得有点少,但又不知道加什么,所以希望老师给补充几句好的观点.还有,希望修改后的作文能达到11分以上.o(∩_∩)o