Nowadaysmoreandmorepeoplechoosetobevolunteersinthecommunityattheirsparetime.Lastweekourclasswenttoalocalwelfarehousetovisittheoldpeople.
MyclassmatesandIdidwhatwecouldtohelpthem.Somecleanedtheroomsgardensandalltheplaceswhichneededtobecleaned;somereadnewspapersandmagazinestotheoldpeople;otherstalkedhappilywiththelonelyones.Wetriedourbesttoshowourloveandcareandweactuallydidit.
Franklyspeakingweweresohappythatday.Whenwehelpedotherswealsogetsomethingmoreimportant.Thatiswhenyoupayyougain.Sopleaseshowyourloveshowyourcareandoursocietywillbemorebeautifulandmoreharmonious.
分析:
本文是一篇给ChinaDaily介绍同学们义工活动情况而写的报道,开头已经给出,所以只注意组织好篇章结构和要点的表述即可。其中要点包括1.给老人们读报、打扫卫生等;2.与老人们交流;3.你的感想。动笔前要认真阅读材料,不可遗漏要点,并适当发挥。根据材料内容可知本文主要是一般过去时态,注意时态语时间状语的搭配及主谓一致问题。写作中适当使用连词,注意上下文联系紧密,符合逻辑关系。
【亮点说明】本篇书面表达要点全面,结构紧凑,是一篇较好的范文。这篇短文使用了大量的短语,为文章增色不少,如:moreandmorepeople越来越多的人,Franklyspeaking坦白的说,morebeautifulandmoreharmonious,越美丽,越和谐。还使用了定语从句和排比句Somecleanedtheroomsgardensandalltheplaceswhichneededtobecleaned;somereadnewspapersandmagazinestotheoldpeople;otherstalkedhappilywiththelonelyones.并列句Wetriedourbesttoshowourloveandcareandweactuallydidit.时间状语从句Whenwehelpedotherswealsogetsomethingmoreimportant等多种句式结构,增加了文章的可读性。
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