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  【OseolaMcCartyspentmorethan75yearswashingandironingotherpeople’sclothes.Asalaundrywomanshewaspaidonlyafewdollarseachtime.CertainlynobodywouldconsiderherrichsotheywereallamazedwhenMissMcCartydecidedto】

  OseolaMcCartyspentmorethan75yearswashingandironingotherpeople’sclothes.Asalaundrywomanshewaspaidonlyafewdollarseachtime.CertainlynobodywouldconsiderherrichsotheywereallamazedwhenMissMcCartydecidedtodonate$150000totheUniversityofSouthernMississippi.

  Themoneywasinfactherlifesavings.Shecouldsavesuchalargeamountofmoneybecauseshelivedaverysimplelife.Sheneverlearnedtodriveandwhenshewantedtogosomewhereshejustwalked.Sheneverflewtoanywheretillthedonation,andin50yearsshehadbeenoutoftheSouthonlyonce.Thehouseinwhichshelivedwasalsoarathermodestoneherlastunclelefther.OnlyaftershebecameknowninAmericadidshebegintotravelalloverthecountry.SincethenshehadbeenthesubjectofmanyinterviewsandarticlesandwaseveninvitedtotheWhiteHouse.

  Herdonationwasforstudentswhoclearlyneededfinancialhelp.Sheherselfleftschoolinthesixthgradeandhadnevermarriedorhadchildren.Shesaidtothereportersthattheideaofhelpingsomebody’schildgotocollegegavehermuchpleasure.

  [写作内容]

  用约120个词就MissMcCarty的捐助谈谈你的想法,内容包括:

  (1)你如何看待她的捐助行为;

  (2)你认为她的捐助对受惠学生有哪些影响;

  (3)如果你自己要捐助,你会选择哪个群体并陈述理由。

  [写作要求]

  1.作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事,也可以参照阅读材料的内容,但不得直接引用原文的句子。

  2.作文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称。

  OseolaMcCartywasalaundrywomanformorethan75years.Sheearnedafewdollarseachtime.Butshedonated$150000whichwasherlifesavingstohelpthestudentswhoneededfinancialhelp.

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2020-03-19 06:35
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  OseolaMcCartywasalaundrywomanformorethan75years.Sheearnedafewdollarseachtime.Butshedonated$150000whichwasherlifesavingstohelpthestudentswhoneededfinancialhelp.Ithinkherbehaviorisworthpraisingandveryunselfish.Everyoneshouldhelpothersinneed.Buthowmuchtodonateshouldbebasedonouractualsituation.The$150000isveryhelpfultothestudentswhohavefinancialproblems.Theycanbuymanythingstheyneedasotherstudents.Andtheymaybemoregratefulandkinder.Thereforeit’smorelikelyforthemtohelpothersinthefuture.IfIamgoingtogivedonationsIwillchoosestudentstoo.Theyareinthemostimportantperiodintheirlife.Theyneedtogetalongeducation.Theyhavetobuyalotofbookspencil-casespenserasersandsoonwhichwillcertainlycostalot.Theyaregrowinguprapidlywhichneedsalotofnutrition.Iftheydon’thaveenoughmoneytheycan’teatenoughfoodandtakeinenoughenergy.Inawordmoneyisveryimportanttostudents.(189words)

  分析:

  该作文是给材料作文。根据短文写一篇文章,首先要看懂寓言说的是什么,然后围绕中心意思结合自己的经历进行写作。文章主题注意条理要清晰,逻辑顺序和结构要恰当,同时要尽量保持简洁精干的内容,不拖泥带水。要注意题中所给的信息,不可偏题,应用文写作对于文章内容的要求是要达到写作目的。尽量保持卷面整洁,字体美观,注意行文的连贯性。使用一些高级句型和词汇提升作文档次.

  【亮点说明】原文给出的句子不看。答案第一句Butshedonated$150000whichwasherlifesavingstohelpthestudentswhoneededfinancialhelp.使用了两个定语从句,一个是which引导的修饰$150000,另一个是who引导的定语从句修饰students。但是她捐赠了她全部积蓄的十五万美金来帮助那些需要财政帮助的孩子们。答案第二段第一句提出自己的观点。第四句The$150000isveryhelpfultothestudentswhohavefinancialproblems.也是一个定语从句,who修饰前面的students,在从句中做主语。第三段第一句是一个if引导的条件状语从句。IfIamgoingtogivedonationsIwillchoosestudentstoo.如果我想要捐钱,我也会选择捐献给学生。第四句是一个非限制性定语从句Theyhavetobuyalotofbookspencil-casespenserasersandsoonwhichwillcertainlycostalot.他们需要买很多的书、铅笔盒、笔、橡皮擦等等一些东西,这些一定会花费很多钱。第五句和第四句结构,一样也是一个非限制性定语从句Theyaregrowinguprapidlywhichneedsalotofnutrition.他们快速的成长着,这需要很多的营养。第六句Iftheydon’thaveenoughmoneytheycan’teatenoughfoodandtakeinenoughenergy.是一个if引导的条件状语从句,如果他们没有足够的钱,他们不会迟到足够的食物,吸收足够的能量。除了很多从句以外,本文也用了一些比较好的短语如第二段的beworthdoing值得做某事;basedon基于;it’slikelyto很有可能做;Inaword总而言之。这是一篇比较不错的范文。

  考点:

  考察给材料作文。

2020-03-19 06:39:39

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