【求托福改作文独立写作我很迷惑再次调整了一下写作方法,然后写了这篇,我都不知道该怎么写了.大的方向和结构对吗?请仔细批改一下,还有想问倒数第二段hardly开头的句子对不对.最后就是】
求托福改作文独立写作我很迷惑
再次调整了一下写作方法,然后写了这篇,我都不知道该怎么写了.大的方向和结构对吗?请仔细批改一下,还有想问倒数第二段hardly开头的句子对不对.最后就是能得多少分.我真实考试可能30分钟写不了这么多,可能会少50词（这篇是427个词）,非常非常感谢.
Doyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement?Itisoftennotagoodideatomovetoanewcityoranewcountrybecauseyouwillloseoldfriends.
Astechnologydevelopsincreasingly,peoplestarttobeunsatisfiedwiththeirstatusquo.Especiallyforthenewgeneration,stayinginoneplaceforacoupleofyearsisunacceptable.Itturnsout“Let’smove”isbecominganewattitudetowardslife.Butthecomingproblemissomepeopleareworriedaboutlosingtheiroldfriendsiftheymovetoanewcityoranewcountry.However,I’mnotworriedaboutitatallbecauseofthefollowingreasons.
Ibelievethere’snoneedtodoubtourcommunicationtechnologyforlongdistancenowadays.TherearemillionsofmeanstogetintouchwithyouroldfriendssuchasE-mail,chattingonlineandusingvideocamera.Forinstance,myfriendusesvideocameratochatwithhermotherwholivesinGermanyduetoherworkassignmenteveryweek.TheyquitemisseachotherbuttheInternethelpsthemalotandreducestheirhomesicktosomeextents.What’smore,transportationsystemexpandssoquicklythatthemotherandthedaughtercanmeetrightaway.
Inaddition,movingawayfromtheused-to-beplaceisasignificantopportunitytobroadyourhorizon.Youwillexperiencetheexoticculturesandbrandnewlifestylesonyourown.Suchappealingandinspiringexperienceisespeciallyirresistibleforyoungpeople.Forexample,whenmyunclewasathisearlythirties,hegotmarriedandmovedtoEurope.HeandhiswifehavebeentomorethantencountriesinEuropeandfinallycamebackthreeyearsafterhisdeparture.Afterthislongtraveling,hisattitudeandvalueoflifetotallychanged,comingoutnewmotivationandfocusingonincreasinglifequality.Severalcrucialdecisionsweremadeinthecomingyearsbyhimasarefreshedandoptimisticperson.Honestly,it’shardtonotbeproudofhim.
Whereas,movingtoanewplaceisalsoachallenge.Littlekidscan’tputupwithnotseeingtheirmothersforalongtime.Hardlycanfamiliesandfriendsworryaboutyouifyoudon’tliveinadifferentcountrywherepeoplespeakadifferentlangu