【从用词是否准确、语言是否流畅、单词句型是否丰富,单复数、思路清晰、语法有没有错误这几个方面入手,点评一下看看如果要是10分满分我能打几分?Asallknows,smoking,which,asalways,posingathreat】

　　从用词是否准确、语言是否流畅、单词句型是否丰富,单复数、思路清晰、语法有没有错误这几个方面入手,点评一下看看如果要是10分满分我能打几分?

　　Asallknows,smoking,which,asalways,posingathreattoourlifeandenvironment,isspendingagrossofmoneyoftheworldanddeprivingtherightsofpeopletobehealthy.

　　Thepictureshowsthatthepercentintheholepopulationoftheworldisnearly20%---whiletheworld’snumberis5.8billion,thepartofsmokingis1.1billion.Andundertheastonishingnumberofitisthatcountlesslossofbothwealthandlives:astheimagesaysthattherearealmost200billiondollarslossawayand30millionpeopledieineachyear.Thedestructiveimpactsandthepainfulsufferingsitbroughtusevenlysurpassmostkindsofvirusdoes.

　　Whileitoffersusthedatathatmakeusbeawareoftheconsequencesofsmokingareperilous,italsoprovidedthatthereisaliterallydeduction.Theoutputin1995waslessthanthelastyear—14.2billionpoundin1995while14.364billionpoundin1994.Itismainlybecausethefavorablepolitics,but,ithasnotbeenassuccessfulaspeopleexpected.

　　Isuggestthatthewaywemaystoppeoplefromsmokingistojointheeffortsbyallsectorsofsocietytobanthetobacco,andadditionalmoreforcefulmeasuresshouldbeconsideredbythegovernment.