一句英文.这句话里四个逗号哪些可以省去?或者说省去之后语句更地道?省去就是说逗号前后直接相连Aftergraduation,shewasemployed,asateacher,bythedepartmentofmanagement,PekingUniversity.毕业后她被

　　一句英文.这句话里四个逗号哪些可以省去?或者说省去之后语句更地道?省去就是说逗号前后直接相连

　　Aftergraduation,shewasemployed,asateacher,bythedepartmentofmanagement,PekingUniversity.

　　毕业后她被北大管理系聘请为教师.

　　AftergraduationshewasemployedasateacherbythedepartmentofmanagementPekingUniversity.