【请高手修改并评价这篇4级作文,Forthispart,youareallowed30minutestowriteashortessayentitledRecreationalActivities.Youshoulwriteatleast120wordsfollowingtheoutlinegivenbelow.1娱乐活动多种多样2娱乐活动可以】

　　请高手修改并评价这篇4级作文,

　　Forthispart,youareallowed30minutestowriteashortessayentitledRecreationalActivities.Youshoulwriteatleast120wordsfollowingtheoutlinegivenbelow.

　　1娱乐活动多种多样

　　2娱乐活动可以使人们受益,也可能带来危害

　　3作为大学生,我认为.

　　RecreationalActivities

　　Incolleges,especiallyinChinesecolleges,studentsgetfreedomfromthemorefraternal,morerelaxing,andmoreharmoniousatmosphere.Intheirsparetime,lotsofrecreationalactivitiesareavailable.Forinstance,sports,clubactivities,computergames,tripsareallstudents'favoriteactivities.

　　However,whenwefindoutsomeadvantagesaboutrecreationalactivities,Ireckonthattherearesomedisadvantagesaboutrecreationalactivitiesaswell.Tobeginwith,playingcomputergamesdoalotofharmtostudents.Independentastheyare,teachersandparentscannotinterveneprofoundlyintheirdailylife,whichwillresultinstudents'lackofconcentrationontheirstudy.Subsequently,manyclubactivitiesseemtobeawasteoftime.Manyactivitiesjustfocusongettingtogetherandgoingousidethecampustohaveameal.Scarcelycantheymakeprogressfromthiskindofactivities.Moreover,goingonatriptosomewhereelseisagoodidea,butwhoguaranteesthesafetyofthestudentsasquiteafewcasesshowthatstudentsincampusaremoreliabletohaveanaccidentwhilegoingonatrip.

　　Asacollegestudent,Ithinkthatweshouldconsidertheprobleminaprovidentway.Recreationalactivitiescanjustbeusedforrelaxationoutofstudytime,butnottobeaddictedtothemandnottoabusethem.