Life的复数是lives.

　　我想做这样的人是：iwanttobepeoplelikethat.

　　musy写错must

　　hard就可以了,或者用morehard,harder不对.

　　becauseIthink改成if

　　haveagoodbody是中国的表达方式,应该改成：keepfit.

　　感冒是catchacold.吃药用take不用eat

　　howto,how写错了

　　likeeatmuchmorevegetables不用like,用suchas或forexample

　　those改成that

　　beside是旁边的意思,身边的人应该用everybodyaroundme

　　好可爱的小盆友啊,加油,写的不错

　　再给你补一篇好一些的,你拿去看一看,

　　MyDreamJob

　　IwanttobeadoctorwhenIgrowup,justlikeMomandDad.

　　Inmyopinion,doctorisagreatjob,becausedoctorcansavemanypeople'slives.Iwanttobepeoplelikethat.

　　Tobeagooddoctor,Imuststudyhardatshcoolfirstly.Secondly,Ishouldkeepfit；Ithinkadocotorwhowanttomakehispatienshealthyshouldbehealthyofhimself.Butthesearestillnotenough.

　　Ishouldlearnaboutillness,too.Forexampel,WhenIcatchacold,whatmedicineshouldItake?Further,I'llgotohospitaltolearnaboutlookingafterpatients.What'smore,I'mplaninggoingtolearnhoutokeepfit,suchaseatingmuchmorevegetablesetc,andtellittomyparentsandfriends.

　　IfIknowthat,Iwouldbeabletotakecareofmyfriendsandmyparents.Everybodyaroundmewillbehealthy.

　　Ihopeillnesswilldisappearintheworld,everybodywillbehealthyandhappyeveryday!