请各位高手帮我看一下这篇四级作文写的怎么样的,有语法错的请帮助我改正,我整体布局不是很好,请别只改语法,我的写作思路一直被老师批评,布局也是,作文二：义务献血1、有些人支持义务

　　请各位高手帮我看一下这篇四级作文写的怎么样的,

　　有语法错的请帮助我改正,我整体布局不是很好,请别只改语法,我的写作思路一直被老师批评,布局也是,

　　作文二：

　　义务献血

　　1、有些人支持义务献血

　　2、有些人对此持消极态度

　　3、我的看法

　　DonatingBlood

　　Nowadays,moreandmorepeoplewouldliketodonatetheirblood.Thisactionnotonlyprovesacitizen’sobligationbutalsooffersagreatkindnesshelptoothers.

　　Weshoulddonateourbloodactively.Becausedonatebloodhaveseveraladvantages.Firstly,donatebloodcanbenefitourhealth.Secondly,bloodthatyoudonatedcanhelppeopleinneed.However,somepeopledisagreewithdonatingblood.Theybelievedonatingbloodwillhavesideeffects.TheyafraidofinfectingtheAIDSvirusandotherimmunesystem’sdisease.

　　Inmyopinion,donatingbloodhasmoreadvantagesthandisadvantages.Notonlyproveacitizen’smoral.Ifonlythemedicaltreatmentagencycleantheirequipmentstrictly,peoplewhodonateshisbloodwon’tinfectedvirus.