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　　请高手帮忙修改并评价指正这篇4级作文,Forthispart,youareallowed30minutestowriteashortessayinhonorofteachersontheoccasionofTeacher'sDay.Youshouldwriteatleast120wordsfollowingtheoutlinegivenbelow.1向老

　　请高手帮忙修改并评价指正这篇4级作文,

　　Forthispart,youareallowed30minutestowriteashortessayinhonorofteachersontheoccasionofTeacher'sDay.Youshouldwriteatleast120wordsfollowingtheoutlinegivenbelow.

　　1向老师表达节日祝贺

　　2从一件小事来回忆老师的教诲和无私的奉献

　　3我如何回报老师的关爱

　　Teacher'sDay

　　Asisknowntousall,todayistheTeacher'sday.Havingattendedouruniversityfortwoyears,Ireallywanttosay"Thankyou!"and"Bestwishes!"toallofmyprofessors,fortheyhavebeenworkinghardandexertingalltheirstrengthtohelpustomakeprogressinourmajor,toenlargeourmind,toopenupoureyes,andsoforth.

　　Inthesetwoyears,therearesomelittlecaseswhichreflectteacher'sconvectionandcontributiontous.Toppingthelist,itwasmyfrenchteacher,MadameGuo,thattakeextratroubleovermyfrenchwhenIhadjusthadasurgery.Onaccountofthesurgery,Ihadtoliedownonthebedandjustreadsomething.Afterherclasses,shecalledonmeandgiveextralessonstome.Atthattime,myheartwasfilledwithgratitude.Whatakind-heartedprefessor!Duringthatsemester,shehadgivenme10extralesson.Inreturn,Itriedmyutmosttoimprovemyfrenchcompetence.Ibecomemoreandmoreboungupinfrench.

　　Asasophomorewhotakesupfrench,Iamlookingforwardtomakingsomeplansorsomewhatpromisesinordertoappreciatemyprofessor,oneofwhichisthatIamgoingtomakemoreeffortstostudyfrench.Additionally,Iwillhelpherwithsomeofherdailywork,consideringthatIhavesomeexperiencesaboutworkingintheStudentUnionandintheYouthLeagueGeneralBranch.

　　最近有人想整我,我不会骂你,因为我不会上当,我可不想被检举禁号.只是1楼这位同学明显不是在改作文,而是在故意找事,把对的说成错的.请不要来百度上拿你不专业的言论来丢人现眼,

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2020-05-15 00:59

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陈修环

　　你好,根据你的文章,我做了如下修改.

　　AsitisknowntoallthattodayisTeachers'Day.（注意as是连词,前后句应该成句,另外运用从句会加分）Havingbeeninmyuniversityfortwoyears,（attend表示出席会议、课堂什么的,来大学两年这样表达就行）Ireallywanttosay"Thankyou"and"Bestwishes"toallmyteachers,fortheyhavebeenworkingsohardandexertingalltheirstrengthtohelpus,broadenourhorizen（开阔眼界这样表达）,enlargeourmind.Withtheirhelp,itisfortunateforustomakegreatprogresses（注意单复数）inourmajor.

　　Duringthesetwoyears,therearesomecasesexpressingtheirselflessdevotiontodutyasteachers.（大学老师用teacher就行,professor是教授）MadameGuo,myFrenchteacher,standsinthefirstplaceinmyheart（在我心目中第一位）.ShespendsherfreetimeteachingmeFrenchafterIhaveoperation.Duringthattime,Ihadtoliedownonbedandonlydidsomereadings,andit'samazingthatGuocametohosiptalfor10timesinpersontomakeupwhatIhadmissedforcourses.Iwasdeeplymovedbysuchakind-heartedperson.Duetoherpersistentcontribution,myFrenchimprovesalotandIbecomemoreandmoreconfidenceinFrench.

　　AsasophomorewhomajorinFrench,I'mlookingforwardtorepayingmyteacher'scontributiontome,andIthinkthebestwayismakemoreeffortstostudyFrench.Additionally,workingintheStudentUnionandintheYouthLeagueGeneralBranchhelpmegainexperienceaboutworking,soIwouldliketoassitantmyteacher'sworktoalleviateherstress.

　　首先,写文章要注意逻辑,必要的语法要掌握,避免结构累赘.

　　givealessontosb表示给某人一个教训、上了一课;心存感激不能是myheartwasfilledwithgratitude,英文中只能是人很感激,主语必须是人,你可以这样表达expressone'sheartfeltgratitude表示衷心的感激；takeup表示占据、开始从事,专业是法语可以这样表达,ImajorinFrench;appreciate,通常是Iappreciateyourhelp,欣赏多用于文学方面,强调对事物有深入的理解能力.表达谢意用expressone'sgratitude最好.

　　这篇文章总体来说真不太算好,实话实说,但是,只要你注意我所说的,注重细节,反复多多去练习,最后把历年真题都做一遍,因为熟能生巧嘛,我相信你四六级作文还是可以很优秀的.

　　望满意~~~~~~~~~~

2020-05-15 01:02:23

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