请帮我修改一下一首英文诗,毕业后的纪念特别重要,希望大家帮我好好改一下就要毕业了,写了一下几年的感触,这事有点舍不得,不想留下什么遗憾,所以特想写好一点,希望大家我我改一下,多
请帮我修改一下一首英文诗,毕业后的纪念特别重要,希望大家帮我好好改一下
就要毕业了,写了一下几年的感触,这事有点舍不得,不想留下什么遗憾,所以特想写好一点,希望大家我我改一下,多谢了.
Dawnblossomspluckedatdusk
Eternityisnotjustdiamond,
Somememories,afteronehundredyears,
Itstillclearlyremains,aliveinourheart.
Thoseweretheday,whenIwasinnocent,whenIwaschildish,
Whenwehavealwaysthoughtabouttheendlessstudies,
Whenwehavealwayscomplainedaboutthetoomuchwork,
Whenwehavealwaysthoughtthatthedayhadneverend.
Sumerturnstowinter,
Saplingbecametrees.
Itwasthetimetopart,
toleavefromtheknownplace.
Itwasthetimestide,
quietly,wipedoutourcorners.
Here,wehavespentmanyseasons,springandfall,
Here,wehavekeepmanymemories,laughterwithtears,
Here,wehaveleftalotoffootprints,aroundaway,
Here,wehavelearnedtooandtoomuch,livetolife.
Wehavealwaysdreamedtoleave,butwhenthedreamcometrue,
Wejustcouldnotletusgo.
Nowwearegoingtopart,nowwearenotnaughtyagain.
Allthingswillbewritteninthehistory,
whichwewillkeepdeepinourhearts.
It'ssuchaspecialfeeling
Tocloseoureyesandreminisceawhile.
Thetiderecedes,butleavesbehindbrightseashellsonthesand.
Foreveryjoythatpasses,somethingbeautifulremains.
谢谢大家帮忙,但我还有一个小问题语法的错误已经被Jen小文大师纠正了,能不能在帮再我把这首诗改的更加押韵一点,更加顺畅一点,总是觉得读起来比较绕口,不是那么流畅.