【帮我看看我的英语作文哪里有错?Nowadays,withthedevelopmentofsociety,peoplehavealotofpressure.Wheredoesthestresscomefrom?Whatshouldtheydotosolvetheseproblems?Parentsalwayswanttheirchildrentobenumberone.Therefor】

　　帮我看看我的英语作文哪里有错?

　　Nowadays,withthedevelopmentofsociety,peoplehavealotofpressure.Wheredoesthestresscomefrom?Whatshouldtheydotosolvetheseproblems?

　　Parentsalwayswanttheirchildrentobenumberone.Thereforetheyoffertheirchildrenvariousclass.However,manychildrenhatemostoftheclass.What'smore,thechildrenlosttheirfreedom.Inmyopinion,parentsshouldgivetheirchildrenmorefreedom,letthemstudyindependentlyandmakethemdowhattheywanttodo.

　　Adultsalsohavepressure.Theyshouldcompetewiththeircolleagues.Itishardtogetappreciationfromtheirbosses.Theymusttrytheirbesttogetalongwellwiththeircustomers.Ithinktheyshouldhavemoretimetorelax.Andtheycanalsotalktotheirfriends,companionortheeldertosolvetheproblem.

　　Theelderhasretired.Itistimetoenjoythemselves.Howevertheyalsohavepressure.Theyhavenoincome.Whentheygetolder,theywillhavealotofhealthproblems.Andtheyoftenfeellonely.SoIsuggesttheyoungcarefortheirparentsmoreandspendmoretimewiththem.

　　Thougheveryonehavemanypressure,butitnotbadtousall,sometimeitwillmakesusstudyharder,workharderandcherishthechancewehave.Soweshouldtreatthepressurecorrectly