【各位大大,关于托福OG上独立写作范文的问题,我怎么感觉那篇5分范文很垃圾,结构感觉不清晰很多语言感觉很啰嗦的,用词错误的地方就不说了.不知道是不是我的水平不够,还是我习惯了用XDF那】
各位大大,关于托福OG上独立写作范文的问题,我怎么感觉那篇5分范文很垃圾,结构感觉不清晰
很多语言感觉很啰嗦的,用词错误的地方就不说了.不知道是不是我的水平不够,还是我习惯了用XDF那套写作套路,还请各位指点,让我认识自己的缺点呀
DISHONESTYKILLSRELIABILITY
Therearecertainconsiderationsorfactorsthateveryonetakesintoaccountinarelationship.Peoplemaylookforhonesty,altruism,understanding,loyalty,beingthoughtfuletc!Everyonewouldmoreorlesswishthatthepersons/heis
dealingwith,hassomeofthesevirtuesabove.Puttingtheminanorderaccordingtotheirimportance,howevercanbeverysubjectiveandrelative.
Whensomeoneaskshim/herselfthequestion“WhatdoI
considertobethemostimportantthinginmyrelationship?”theanswer
dependsonalotoffactorssuchashowhis/herearlierrelationshipswere.
Afterstatingthateveryone’sopinion
canbedifferentaboutthis,formehonesty,inotherwords,alwaystellingthe
truthisthemostimportantconsiderationinarelationship.Oppositeofthis
isinarguablylyingandifsomeoneneedstolie,eithers/heishiding
somethingorisafraidoftellingmesomething.
Inanyrelationshipofmine,Iwouldwishthatfirstofall,the
personI’mdealingwithishonest.Eventhoughs/hethinksthats/hedid
somethingwrongthatIwouldn’tlike,s/he’dbettertellmethetruthandnot
lieaboutit.LateronifIfindoutaboutalieorhearthetruthfromsomeone
else,that’dbemuchmoreunpleasant.InthatcasehowcanIeverbelieveor
trustthatpersonagain?HowcanIeverbelievethatthispersonhasenough
confidenceinmetoforgivehim/herandcarryonwiththerelationshipfrom
there.SoifIcannottrustapersonanymore,ifthepersondoesn’tthinkI
canhandlethetruth,there’snopointtocontinuingthatrelationship.
AlthoughIwouldliketoseealtruistic,understanding,thoughtful
andloyalbehaviorfrompeople,aninstanceoftheoppositeofthesebehaviors
wouldnotupsetmeasmuchasdishonestywould.Amongallthepossible
behaviors,dishonestyistheonlyoneformethatterminateshowIfeelabouta
person’sreliability.Thereforehonestywouldbem