1.Theshipchangeditscoursebecauseoftherewasastorm.of去掉becauseofsth,because后面加句子

　　2.Hangzhouisfamousasitsbeautifulscenery.as改为forbefamousfor以什么而出名befamousas做为什么而出名

　　3.Speakslowlyandtrytomakeyourselfunderstand.slowlier与之前讲话速度成对比

　　4.Myfatherhastwobrothers,bothofthemareallPartymembers.all去掉已经有both用于两者的都

　　5.Thecompositioniswellwrittenexceptafewspellingmistakes.exceptfor词组搭配

　　6.Ibelievethefundamentalgoodnessofhumannature.believein相信

　　7.Thebookisintendedfortheusualreader,notforthespecialist.usual是指通常的而general是指一般的

　　8.Herintensionofvisitingtheschoolwasseethelibrary.wastosee..应该是的为了看看图书馆

　　9.TheworkissotiredthatIsoonfelttiring.tired改为tiring是指工作累人而不是指人累

　　10.IpreferreadingbooksratherthanwatchingTVintheevening.ratherthan改为topreferdoingatodoingb

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